Gemini

Read me. Critique me. I appreciate honesty. Review how you will, what you will, but please keep an eye on immersive details like sights, smells and sounds - I'm often too light on them. Please let me know if you care about the characters and the story, if it makes sense and whatnot. Please, however, bear in mind that this story needs to be 17k words or less for a contest. Some details I would normally put in are cut or simply alluded to for space constraints Let me know how it works out. Thank you.