In the Sea (OOB #9)

The boys want the dirt on Skip's night with Clare. To talk or not to talk? This stands alone (as do the boys out in the frigid Maine sea) but is part of a series of stories sharing common characters. The story chronicling Skip's "first time" that night on the beach with Clare is called "Stage-Struck." I'm looking for help on what is effective and what is not -- both overall and in the trenches (sentences, words, what-not). Thanks.

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