The Bitch Brigade of Bridgeton (title change)

When a shy, black, ballerina from a poor neighborhood is thrust into the affluent yet equally dangerous world of the prestigious Bridgeton academy, she is forced to overcome her insecurities in order to defeat the three most ruthless and vindictive girls in the school. I have an agent for this book and I'm on my final edit before he submits it to a publisher. Any help is welcome. Even chapter jumpers are welcome if you comment on grammar, especially commas and verb tense, and whether the overall writing style hooks you. Also, if chapter jumpers could comment specifically on what I can do to make it more engaging, that would be greatly appreciated. Please note: You never find out the main character's name. Not until book three anyway.

• Chapter 1 - Caught in the Noose"Revised 7-31-08 Complete..."
• Chapter 2 - Dancing Dream" In the last chapter, ou..."
• Chapter 3 - The Left Hand"In the last chapter, we lea..."
• Chapter 4 - Shampoo"In this chapter, we learn m..."
• Chapter 5 - Mystery Man Maddox"In the last chapter, we lea..."
• Chapter 6 - Fat Tuesday"In the last chapter, our pr..."
• Chapter 7 - Like The Car"Another run in with LaPorscha."
• Chapter 8 - Crusty Shoes"Our protagonist gets to kno..."
• Chapter 9 - The Almost Kiss"In this chapter, we get to ..."
• Chapter 10 - Just Plain Lust"Will our protagonist go all..."
• Chapter 11 - Jonny Cakes"In this chapter, we find ou..."
• Chapter 12 - Soul of a Saint"Revised 1-29-08"
• Chapter 13 - Nowhere to go "When a shy, black, ballerin..."
• Chapter 14 - First and Last "When a shy, black, ballerin..."
• Chapter 15 - Perfectly Annoying"Will puts the ahhhh in anno..."
• Chapter 16 - Table Dance"In this chapter, we get our..."
• Chapter 17 - The Bitch Brigade Strikes"In the last chapter, Ashley..."
• Chapter 18 - Fight Dirty"In this chapter, Sasha turn..."
• Chapter 19 - Watch Your Back"The Prom...need I say more?..."
• Chapter 20 - Lucky?"Our protagonist suffers a p..."
• Chapter 21 - Dirty Little Secrets"Will reveals a little more ..."
• Chapter 22 - Four Words"Will is jealous of David."
• Chapter 23 - Caught in the Noose II "When a shy, black, ballerin..."
• Chapter 24 - Trapped "When a shy, black, ballerin..."
• Chapter 25 - Sweet Release "When a shy, black, ballerin..."
• Chapter 26 - Ballerina Girl"This is an odd chapter. I ..."
• Chapter 27 - The Audition "When a shy, black, ballerin..."
• Chapter 28 - The Truth "When a shy, black, ballerin..."
• Chapter 29 - Picking Favorites"Once again, this chapter wa..."
• Chapter 30 - Monster "When a shy, black, ballerin..."
• Chapter 31 - Payback's a bitch, bitch!"In this chapter, our protag..."
• Chapter 32 - 'Till Rome"I changed this chapter so t..."
• Chapter 33 - Epilogue, When in Rome"This is a tease for the nex..."
• Chapter 34 - Rejections"These are all the rejection..."