Children Do Remember

This is a story of my inner conflict while I was a child in fifth grade. The story is not finished. Does the story illicit emotion from the reader? Is the character's hatefulness, at times, understandable? Are there enough concrete details? How are the sentence structures? Does it read smoothly? Are you easily able to follow the story? Is it interesting?

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