Black Roses

Haunted houses include the garden. The relationship between these two witches actually captured me. Let me know if I've portrayed them well and how you would improve the characterisation. Edited 10-28: Changed the starting point to find the 'hook' (did this draw you in?) Cut out a lot of the slow setup and tried to work it in with the action. Changed the ending a little. 10-31 took out some of the gratuitous affectations after the dialogue - annoying little buggers.

• Page 1 - Black Roses"Haunted houses include the ..."