The Parade

I'm really unsure about whether I have posted this in the right genre. Please let me know if you think I have make a mistake. I would really like feedback on the voice - how authentic is it? Also, I'm worried about the transition from alienation to humanity - does it work? Finally, my aim was to keep the descriptions realistic, while avoiding sensationalism. Please let me know if you think I've failed to do that.

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