AND A LITTLE CHILD SHALL LEAD THEM (edited 9-26-08)

Well this started out to be a light little story in response to Tom's challenge in the forums, but it sort of grew into something bigger and I fear preachy, but please read until the end before you judge it or me. Thanks. I've edited this fairly heavily and am getting ready to enter it into a contest. I'd appreciate all comments, but on structure and grammar in particular. The more nit picky the better. Thanks!

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