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Alleson is a gorilla of a man, working in a lunar colony bar in the spaceport. After the death of his father he decides to take a vacation earth side. His father left him two intriguing things, an old key from earth, and a book of matches. Surviving long enough to catch a shuttle to Earth, however, is entirely another matter. I am looking for all levels of feedback. I want to get this story ready for submission and sell it. It's been gathering dust long enough.

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Sequel to Wrath of Angels. The story picks up six months after the end of the Nomad War. ***When Carlos is supposedly killed by a bear in Alaska, the seemingly indestructable Lloyd doesn't believe it and goes to find out the truth. He picks up a few unlikely companions on the way and together their adventure takes them on a wild journey through the blizzards of Alaska to the sweltering heat of the jungles in Brazil and back to the tornadic plains of Colorado. Their quest pits them against a ruthless arms dealer, a self-proclaimed Incan Queen, a disfigured Jamaican, a dwarf witchdoctor, and a wicked dominatrix. Starting at Chapter One is always preferred, but any and all constructive reviews are welcomed. **This work employs multiple POVs through short segmented windows of thought or actions and is a continuous story of a trilogy: Wrath of Angels, Angels at the Gate, Angels Ascending. Ratings warning: It contains graphic violence, language, sex and some taboo subject matter.

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I entered this story in a competition a couple of weeks ago. If you don't place or win in the competitions, you don't get feedback. I want to learn from the feedback. This is my second attempt at writing, so I still get nervous submitting my stories. I hope you enjoy this!

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Eon is bored with his life in the year 2410. He decides to take a mental link to several of his past lives, and see exactly who he was, and also what part he played in history. Here is his story. Any feedback is appreciated: Thanks

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Lloyd and Carlos have wandered the wastelands of Colorado, Utah, and Nevada, for almost six years. During this time, they manage to survive thieves, warped prostitutes, evil gangs, and cannibals. Lloyd, a dark and troubled personality, is kept in check by his Cuban companion and psychologist Carlos. When Lloyd is seriously injured in a fight with marauding bandits, Carlos seeks medical attention for him in a nearby city where he meets an old and deadly enemy. From that moment on, their lives take on even more bizarre twists and forces both Lloyd and Carlos into the roles of reluctant heros. FEEDBACK: Smooth read? Particularly strong or weak sections? Plot holes? Continuity errors? Typos? Distracting punctuation errors? (Grammar will be handled by a hired editor before I submit to an agent/publisher.) It's always nice to start at the beginning, but it's up to you.

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Dr. Nathan Rysner is a member of the GenRose Bio-engineering team in Chicago. Nathan is exposed to genetically altered material in an accident in the lab and gains the ability to change his own genetic make up at will. A military black ops group is after him and the genetic protocol that can make a warrior impervious in battle. Nathan is on the run for his life. His adventures introduce him to the love of his life, Sherry Turner. Nathan inadvertently releases a healing gene that causes world wide controversy and instantly causes the medical field to become obsolete. The twists at the end will have you returning to the beginning searching for clues. I'm looking for any and all feedback. I only ask that you read from the beginning if you are reviewing for story line. Nits are welcome. I'm particularly interested in your thoughts on dialogue and believability of scenes.

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Maggie and her niece, Teal, think they already have problems but when Maggie clears out her cellar for Teal to use as a bolt hole from her nagging mother, something far bigger and more terrible happens than either could ever have expected. I would like general feedback please and any will be appreciated! In UK English as usual. Best, Keen

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Inspired by one of those strange dreams that invariably follows surgery.

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A man awakens with a bleeding head wound, long alien-like fingers on one hand, a crystal orb in his palm and no idea who or where he is. Even stranger, the citizens he meets along the way seem to know little, even about themselves, and are constantly losing their train of thought. But as the man starts to unravel his identity, the question he's faced with is, does he truly want to know who he use to be?

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This is just the first few chapters of something I've been working on. I have the plot outline and whatnot for the whole story, just wanting some feeback on the quality.

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