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Reviews |
Credits |
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 | SATURDAY HAD BEEN THE WEEK'S BEST DAY | Justi Moody | Short Story | 0 | 0.00 | Feb 10, 2012 |
Summary:I am writing these childhood stories from age segments. This one belongs to one of the very first age group. I remember a few from here very clearly, but not many of them. Any help you can give me would be appreciated.Chapters: |
 | au courant | Memphis Trace | Short Story | 11 | 0.88 | Feb 7, 2012 |
Summary:Dressing for success.Chapters: |
 | NOVEMBER IS COLD ENOUGH IN THE SOUTH TO KILL A HOG | Justi Moody | Short Story | 4 | 0.65 | Feb 2, 2012 |
Summary:This is yet another of the short childhood memories I am writing. Most of these take place on the farm in the country in the Southern USA. Chapters: |
 | How to Find Your Own Cardiologist | brosna11 | Short Story | 7 | 0.42 | Feb 1, 2012 |
Summary:I was sent to my first cardiologist but the one I found by hunting on my own turned out to be just right for me. Chapters: |
 | Waiting for Irene | clwriter | Short Story | 8 | 0.83 | Jan 31, 2012 |
Summary:Waiting for Irene is a personal essay, listed here in the Memoir category. I wrote it for a specific small literary magazine, specializing in personal essays. It is not a travel article, even though it has some characteristics of that type of narrative. You will find some quotes in the text, which afford the opportunity to link the narrator's personal experiences to a wider context.
Feedback:
Do you find the time shifts between now (Jan. 2012), the recent past (August 2011) and the remote past confusing? If so, please give me specific feedback on which passages are unclear.
Are the visual images clear, letting you see the various locations?
Are there enough specific place names to ground the narrative, yet not clutter up the emotional impact with travel-article-like details?
This essay explains why I had such a long gap in my reading/reviewing on this site back in Aug./Sept.!Chapters: |
 | The Year The Bucs Went All The Way | sycamore flynn | Short Story | 7 | 2.19 | Jan 30, 2012 |
Summary:A boy’s summer rite of passage and a memorable World Series are recalled.Chapters: |
 | Football's Newest Fan | tina_dc_hayes | Short Story | 4 | 0.70 | Jan 29, 2012 |
Summary:This is the true story of how I became a Saints fan, and why. :)Chapters: |
 | MAMA'S JAMMING AGAIN | Justi Moody | Short Story | 4 | 0.49 | Jan 26, 2012 |
Summary:This is one of many personal memories I am doing for my daughter. Maybe I will try to put them together in some fashion for publication. One has been published. I want to know how you reacted to these stories of a time most of you did not live through. It was country living much unlike city living. I appreciated your reviews.Chapters: |
 | IT IS WASH DAY AGAIN | Justi Moody | Short Story | 5 | 0.80 | Jan 23, 2012 |
Summary:This is another of the childhood memories I am writing for my daughter. These come from growing up in the country in the South as an only child of older parents. The world looked a bit different.Chapters: |
 | YOU'RE PRETTY AS A SPECKLED PUP | Justi Moody | Short Story | 5 | 0.50 | Jan 19, 2012 |
Summary:Another of the family history I am doing for my daughter.Chapters: |
 | DAMNED BONE BUTTONS | Justi Moody | Short Story | 3 | 0.50 | Jan 17, 2012 |
Summary:This is part of a group of stories I am writing for my daughter as family history. It is Southern as is the language. I want you to simply tell me what you think.Chapters: |
 | My Earliest Recollection of Christmas-1949 | Erndog | Short Story | 6 | 0.49 | Jan 16, 2012 |
Summary:I decided to write this after we had our son. I never thought as myself as a rather Christmas-y guy, but having kids can change that. It is a vivid memory, and the only one of Christmas I can remember.Chapters: |
 | 1946 Part Two | brosna11 | Short Story | 5 | 0.33 | Jan 16, 2012 |
Summary:In the first half of this story, my brother tries boxing after joining the Merchant Marines and serving in the Atlantic and Pacific during the occupation. No doubt I had interesting brothers who lived in interesting times. Is this too condensed, should I expand it more? Thanks for your suggestions. Chapters: |
 | The Basketball Game | theo vanguard | Short Story | 5 | 0.66 | Jan 5, 2012 |
Summary:Memories of a pickup basketball game I was in and why it meant something special.Chapters: |
 | 1946 | brosna11 | Short Story | 9 | 1.21 | Jan 3, 2012 |
Summary:I wrote this unfinished story for my sister who can't remember very well our brother who died as a POW in Korea. She was born in '44 and he died in '51. I'm hoping to finish this in a few chunks. I don't see it as book-length but rather as a short memoir. The Greatest Generation had their families at home, their little sisters wishing they would return in one piece. So the little sisters were wounded too, emotionally scarred forever by a horrible war and its aftermath, the Korean conflict. My brother went from Occupying Army to combat in North Korea, where he starved on a 3 month hike to China. Some of his buddies survived miraculously and are old fellows now. Chapters: |
 | A Sonnet for Satin | Janet Taylor-Perry | Poetry | 4 | 0.48 | Dec 30, 2011 |
Summary:A small tribute to my favorite pet ever. I don't expect this one to win any awards. I just wanted to share it with my friends.Chapters: |
 | The Chilli is Not the Whole Curry: One Woman, One Prophecy, Two Countries, and Two Adoptions | Sarah in India | Novel | 1 | n/a | Dec 17, 2011 |
Summary:My story is a novelistic yet factual account of my personal journey of moving to India with my husband. I am in search of adventure and motherhood, but as I struggle to find my feet in a foreign land, I also traverse a rocky path to parenthood. It is a fortuneteller’s prophecy of a “dark-skinned child” which proves my hardest test; my emotional battle with infertility in a developing country makes me contemplate my need for birth children. India’s poverty (her street children, orphans, and child labourers) influences me to question my priorities, and I follow a path of personal growth that is lined with uncertainty and fear. When my husband and I decide to adopt a child we face another set of hurdles. Our touching journey leads us to Cambodia where the clairvoyant’s prediction comes true. Chapters: |
 | F1 Italian Grand Prix 1988 - Enzo Ferrari's final farewell | TeddyP | Short Story | 5 | 0.67 | Dec 16, 2011 |
Summary:This is my entry for the sports story contest. I can remember this day like it was yesterday!Chapters: |
 | The Pet Deer | helen grey | Short Story | 1 | 1.59 | Dec 9, 2011 |
Summary:Hi, this is a complete re-write changing the narrative to third person following feedback from the last posting. I also tried to give a little bit more context. I wanted to bring in some dialogue too but somehow that just didn't happen!!! I tried to keep the simplicity of the language but tone down the "little girl" voice. This was following some feedback but also I went to the Library to do some research and try to be a little clearer in my mind as to the target age group. I always intended the stories to be illustrated so if I could just ask everyone to imagine a large & colorful picture book read aloud to children in the 3 - 6 year old age group... I love feedback and am really grateful for any thoughts or help you can give. HG.Chapters: |
 | The Ship Rock | helen grey | Short Story | 6 | 0.59 | Dec 5, 2011 |
Summary:Hi, again, this story goes back so far I just do not know how accurate it is. The snake existed and I believe that my brother did push me down and step between me and the snake. I made the snake a red and black viper to be a bit more colourful though I have a feeling, from the picture in my mind, that it was a beige and black puff adder.
****have just ditched the red and black and turned it back into a puff adder - it felt better being more accurate!!!******
The ship rock, the fish eagle and the fish eagle tree are all true. I enjoyed writing about it - but I would be interested in any feedback of how it works as a story or any suggestions...Chapters: |
 | Long Road Home | brosna11 | Poetry | 10 | 0.61 | Nov 26, 2011 |
Summary:Raising a family can be hazardous to your health but survival of the fittest is my philosophy and somehow we manage. Hang in there and do what you have to do. The poem expresses this theme without being sentimental or preachy, just tells it like it is. If you're looking for Hallmark, I don't do that.
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 | Kijiji Days | helen grey | Short Story | 6 | 0.71 | Nov 20, 2011 |
Summary:A kijiji is a village in Kiswahili. This was a strange story for me to write. I know I spent time with Rachi's wife. (Rachi is pronounced Ray Chee). I remember the village. Or was it big enough to be a village? Being puzzled because people talked to me and I could not understand and then suddenly understanding them. Not being able to weave the grasses and suddenly being able to weave them... for the rest - I'm not sure. It seems to me I could not have been as unsupervised as I recall? Surely!!! But I still have these snapshots in my mind.
The memories are mainly visual with no audio. I do remember smells:- sunshine, dirt, coconut oil, spice and sweat - all combined. Somehow I could not seem to find the right place for a smell description.
This is a new story, written since I was on this site. I tried to apply some of the very kind (and helpful!) feedback I have received for my last stories. It is actually a bit easier to write a new story than to correct some of the old ones! I am happy for any constructive feedback!
PS - just spoke to someone from Tanzania and the proper word for the language is Kiswahili - I think the other way is a shortened version?
hg
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 | The Danish Santa Claus | helen grey | Short Story | 6 | 0.69 | Nov 17, 2011 |
Summary:Hi,
This is the second children's story I have posted. All of the stories are based on memory - I think they are mostly true, but nearly fifty years is a heck of a long time! I have changed the PoV to third person following previous feedback. In fact I have done a complete re-write. I hope this works but am open to and welcome any feedback - hgChapters: |
 | Winter Changed the World | WriteOn | Short Story | 5 | 0.29 | Nov 13, 2011 |
Summary:Winter in the seventies. This was dragged out of an old closet and given a thorough scrubbing. I will be entering it in a local contest on winter tales so I'm limited to 400-500 words. I'm open to any comments... Chapters: |
 | BEASTS OUTSIDE MY WINDOW | William Brettone | Short Story | 6 | 0.91 | Nov 10, 2011 |
Summary:Did you even hear stream locomotives rumbling close by in the night, heading for unknown places down the line?Chapters: |
 | There Are Mind Monsters | Chalice Divine | Poetry | 5 | 0.39 | Nov 7, 2011 |
Summary:The usual, any and all feedback. The emotional impact is important to me, as well as how you relate. Thanks:)Chapters: |
 | Changed | Chalice Divine | Poetry | 7 | 0.94 | Nov 7, 2011 |
Summary:processing childhood... does it ever end?
any and all feedback welcome. free verse is hard to evaluate as the authorChapters: |
 | "Internot" Dating | Janet Taylor-Perry | Short Story | 16 | 1.78 | Nov 6, 2011 |
Summary:I felt like sharing my short story that was published with my friends on TNBW. I am now free to market it to other venues and am considering sending it to some women's magazines. We see so much about the success of internet dating, but I wonder how many experiences are more like mine. Chapters: |
 | Ice Cream, Remembered | William Brettone | Short Story | 5 | 1.15 | Nov 5, 2011 |
Summary:When you were a kid, did you ever really, really want an ice cream cone on a HOT day?Chapters: |
 | Souvenirs | clwriter | Short Story | 7 | 0.79 | Nov 2, 2011 |
Summary:This is a memoir/personal essay. It is actually from several summers ago. I submitted it to a competition and it didn't get picked, so it's never been published. Maybe some of you can help me out with this, and I'll polish it up and re-submit. It would probably do better if I could get it down to 1,000 words, so I could use advice about which 292 words to cut. This is non-fiction, remember, and mostly nature oriented, so don't go expecting me to jazz it up with a sex-in-the-sand scene! I would only send it to an online or print magazine which publishes nature, travel, personal essay, etc.Chapters: |
 | My Ghost Story | dagnee | Short Story | 11 | 0.43 | Oct 31, 2011 |
Summary:This is a true story. Chapters: |
 | Saying Goodbye | Jackie Madden Haugh | Short Story | 6 | 0.37 | Oct 25, 2011 |
Summary:Selling a family home is always emotional, but there is so much more to treasure than the building that housed a family for 52 years.Chapters: |
 | -O P T I C- | Memphis Trace | Short Story | 2 | 4.65 | Oct 2, 2011 |
Summary:Tips on how to become a star author.Chapters: |
 | Strawberry Patch | C Lee Brown | Short Story | 0 | 2.75 | Sep 28, 2011 |
Summary:An interesting afternoon with an ex-wife, a strawberry garden and a snake.Chapters: |
 | TODAY WAS ONE OF THOSE RARE DAYS | Cynthia Allison | Short Story | 6 | 0.40 | Sep 20, 2011 |
Summary:Every once in a while i wish i were young again...A short story wrapped in poetic language.Chapters: |
 | An Old Friend. | Dan Philips | Poetry | 9 | 0.36 | Aug 5, 2011 |
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 | First Date | Janet Taylor-Perry | Short Story | 4 | 0.28 | Jul 28, 2011 |
Summary:Recounting my first date.
Does it bring a chuckle to you? Does it make you smile?Chapters: |
 | Fig Leaves and Toilet Paper | Janet Taylor-Perry | Short Story | 4 | 0.68 | Jul 28, 2011 |
Summary:A nightmarish memory, sad, but true.
Does the story make you laugh even a little?Chapters: |
 | Daniel's End | j l mo | Short Story | 9 | 1.35 | Jul 24, 2011 |
Summary:Daniel has passed. Thanks for all of the encouragement provided.
He left behind a house full of possessions which must be sorted through. This will not be easy. Please keep us in your thoughts and prayers.Chapters: |
 | Daniel's in the Hospital - Part 2 | j l mo | Short Story | 3 | 1.07 | Jul 22, 2011 |
Summary:Yes, Daniel is still in the hospital. This is the fill in up to Wednesday, and the rest of the story is yet, unwritten. By me, or the Powers that be.Chapters: |
 | Daniel's in the Hospital | j l mo | Short Story | 4 | 0.81 | Jul 16, 2011 |
Summary:Another tale of Daniel. This might be close to the end of the line...
All feedback welcome. Thanks for reading and reviewing.Chapters: |
 | Pigeon-sill Sunday | Odin Roark | Short Story | 8 | 0.36 | Jul 16, 2011 |
Summary:This is an experiment in both the recalling of motivations we employ at different times in our lives to understand ourselves better, as well as formatting a different style of short story/prosetry for me. Let me know how it works for you.
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 | There Was A Time When I Was Five | flowing pencil | Poetry | 12 | 0.69 | Jun 28, 2011 |
Summary:Very likely this needs a lot of work. I tend to quickly write what comes to me. To catch the emotion rather than the technical accuracy.
This is more of a memoir piece. Any and all feedback is appreciated!
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 | Four Feet to the Yard | Memphis Trace | Novel | 2 | n/a | Jun 23, 2011 |
Summary:An exciting life of mostly sitting. I'd like oral feedback, please.Chapters: |
 | Roof Food Clothes | j l mo | Short Story | 4 | 0.62 | Jun 18, 2011 |
Summary:A tribute to my Dad.Chapters: |