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This story is about a woman in her mid twenties discovering herself and dealing with issues from her childhood. It's also a story of murder, deceit, love, hate, etc. Tiamat Ashtad, or Tash as she is called, is a half angel who spent her childhood in foster homes. She survived child abuse in many forms and grew into a strong young woman. As she faces her past and discovers her niche in life her future is in doubt. I'm looking for feedback on everything. Don't worry about being gentle I've got thick skin. I do however ask that you respect myself and my characters. I'm here to learn and grow. :)

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Book one of four in the KingMaker Series. Stephen finds the magic sword KingMaker. While practicing with it he encounters an ogre and begins his path to the throne. But what makes a king? Is it the man, or the sword?

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These are the first few chapters of what I hope will become a very long work of serial epic fantasy. (I aspire to being favorably compared with Robert Jordan, Stephen R. Donaldson, and George R.R. Martin.) I'll accept any and all feedback at this point. But I'm most specifically looking for feedback on the pacing of the novel, whether the action is too quiet (if you will) and really, what you believe is needed (if anything) to carry the momentum of the novel such that folks are waiting eagerly in line for the second book in the series.

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The inkling has made a terrible mistake. Because of him something that never should have been awoken has arisen from the shadows and the world of Ink has fallen into peril. It seems there's no hope for the magical creatures living there, as well as the inkling himself. But suddenly a young girl steps into the scene and a new path is laid out that just - just mght work. But of course, she doesn't know... (OH NO! ARYANNE HAS BEEN HIT WTH ANOTHER IDEA WITHOUT FINISHING THE OTHER TWO NOVELS SHE'S SO CRAZY ABOUT! DON'T WORRY, FOLKS - I'M STILL WORKING ON THOSE TWO. THIS IS JUST A SUDDEN IDEA...BUT I STILL NEED FEEDBACK! THIS IS A NOVEL INTENDED FOR A YOUNG ADULT AUDIENCE - PLEASE KEEP THIS IN MIND AS YOU READ. ANY AND ALL FEEDBACK IS WELCOME.)

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***Newly started series! I haven't abandoned Silverstone, thankfully, but this is something a friend and I planned a long time ago, and I've decided to start it up again, though by myself. I THINK my friend has lost interest in writing, sadly. Please give me the best feedback you can.*** Wren is an orphan boy living with his old grandfather, peacefully and happily, when he is faced by a whole series of disasters much too harsh for just a young child of twelve. There is no choice for him but to face the road ahead, but the only problem is, how?

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Jason knows his Shakespeare. He can recite every word of every play, every scrap of history, every syllable of criticism that’s referenced the Bard of Avon. But Jason has just discovered a world within our own, where monsters and murderers hunt for a powerful treasure missing for the last four hundred years. This is more-or-less finished piece. I'm looking for reactions as well as plot holes, inconsistencies, and anything else that can polish this into a better story.

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Falco is an orphan of fifteen, living in a little Hut Sam made a long, long time ago, with seven other people, all poor. They live across the old bridge from Lorville, the main village of Lorale, an eastern realm of Men in Maren. But for the past years, the whole land has been cast over with shadow, unknown except for the fact that it undoubtedly comes from the northern evil realm of Shador. Word is that a fearful power is rising again, and so everyone living in Maren trembles at the thought of a disasterous future. No longer do the creatures venture out of their homes, and most races have long since hidden away. But of course, none of that mattered much to Falco and his 'family' in the past, since they had each other and were thankful enough for that. But famine has struck Lorale once again after many years, and in desperate need for money, Falco ventures out into the village to find some work. He does, luckily (or so he thinks at first), but the man he is to work for is extremely strange and mysterious, and frighteningly ghastly-looking. But there's no other way he can turn to to earn money fast, and besides, he can't help feel proud of himself for finding a place to work so quickly. But after this first encounter with a stranger he's never seen before, more odd things begin to happen. Secrets are uncovered, even within his circle of family. But it's all just the beginning... ALL AND ANY FEEDBACK IS WELCOME. PLEASE BEAR WITH ME TO THE END, AND GIVE SPECIFIC REVIEWS. THANK YOU, AND NO CHAPTER-JUMPING!

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An idea for an English creative writing unit im doing atm. It's based on a myth I love, starting half way through. It's based on the goddess Rhiannon. Let me know what you think. I've re-done the ending of this, but I havn't tey had a chance to have a look at editing the rest! Please tell me your comments on whether this ending wraps up te story better...and if it tells you the reasons for her being framed etc...and if you can work out who stole the baby! =D

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Jewel, half-alien, half-human, was no ordinary ten year old.

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Rick and Bobo - Two brothers: one a genius, one not. -- What would you do if you suddenly had way too much money? After the usual thrills, if you got bored enough, and happened to be two movie fanatic brothers, you might just try to become a superhero. -- -- This is a 100k word superhero/comedy adventure and is the first in a 4 book series. In addition to critiquing the content, if you find any typos or grammatical errors, please let me know. -- -- This story is written in 3rd perso omni, although I have brought my narrator in too late. That being said, if you notice any pov issues that sound awkward even though there is a narrator, please point them out, and if you would, suggest a fix. Thank you!

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This was a book I started as an exercise to get over my writer's block for my other story. I kind of like it, but I've never written fantasy before. I could use some honest feedback.

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There are many mysterious creatures in the world, and Maris and her brother Zach encounter one in the hills behind their home in Nova Scotia. What they don't know is that this encounter is really their recruitment into the Otheworld, where they will meet other children like themselves. I appreciate any and all feedback, and definitely appreciate even the time you take to read and respond to this story!

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I have the body of a goblin-kin, but even more shocking, is that I chose to become this monster. I was a soldier who believed in honor and discipline, but those two concepts are not even understood in the society I must now embrace. Two images from my past haunt my present: my betrothed, Altherie Evenal, and the gnome in my tapestry. I understand why Altherie is constantly in my thoughts, but the gnome from my tapestry is an enigma. Although he was only a wall hanging, he seems as real as the woman I love. Could there be a connection between my obsession with his image and my current predicament? Or is he the key to my release, my salvation from the body of the monster I now inhabit?

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Dark Lady Rising is an exploration of the notion of good and evil - from the perspective of Kellara, an assassin of great renown. She and her lover Lord Zarin are out to rule the world. But the gods may have other plans for them. All feedback is appreciated. In particular, the characters, plot hooks and the level of interest generated from chapter to chapter.

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PART ONE: THE SUNFLOWER STONE

***Every five hundred cycles, harvest world champions, one planter (male) and one picker (female) are chosen and plucked from the harvest world. According to tradition, they shall be honoured and revered as high royalty by all tribes of the third kingdom before commencing their procession to the valley of Khazurn on the first moon. There on the onyx redemption thrones on the night of the third moon, the rebirth ritual shall be performed, when the planter and picker shall meld together and restore equilibrium and order to the union of worlds.
***So it is written.***
Except that six hundred and thirty eight cycles have now passed since the last ritual and the laws that rule the elements are beginning to fail. The Lore of Invocation, the lore to bring champions from the harvest world is lost, the assembly of summoning, an academy of the finest sorcerer minds in the land, was disbanded over two hundred cycles ago, disbanded and exiled. So a collective of the best available magicians is hastily assembled at the Aulderly Institute of Monastic Studies from all corners of the kingdom, some of them fledgling apprentices to aged inept tutors, some little more than daughters of woodland witches, some from dark corners considered dangerous by the old assembly where ancient animosities are not forgotten. But in any world, desperate times call for desperate measures.

And out of the six and a half billion people currently populating earth, the harvest world, Simon Banner is not one of the chosen. He is nevertheless drawn to the kingdom through a series of seemingly unconnected events.

In the meantime, the hastily chosen Jessica and Daniel may not have been as carefully chosen as tradition might otherwise have dictated. She is a disillusioned Valium-popping housewife and he is a gay, cynical teacher. Not exactly the ideal partnership for a melding.

But then, is prophecy still prophecy if nobody but the long-dead prophet knows what the outcome ought to be?

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