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Jayson Abbott is a self imposed loner with a rare disorder, who is a master at staying out of stressful situations. When a new project, that could potentially bring a cure to cancer, falls in his lap he has no choice but to leave the stress free life he has created for himself and open himself up to the world again. Along the way he meets a boy, Owen Spence, who will change the way he feels about letting people close. But keeping Owen safe and alive during the next few weeks may be the hardest job of all. I am looking for all types of feedback; concept, believability, character strength and weakness, as well as grammar cues.

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Karen Phillip's life is heading in a direction she has finally chosen for herself – a direction far away from her nearly estranged father, Stanley. But one phone call and an unfortunate sense of obligation, forces her to put everything on hold as she heads back to her hometown after Stanley has an accident at a cocktail party. Karen decides to investigate what happened, managing to upset most of the locals. She starts to get the sense that Stanley's accident was no accident after all. A brief affair with a townie, a harrowing escape at a trailer park and a narrow miss from angry drug dealers are just a few of the adventures that follow, leaving Karen wondering what she has gotten her self into since "Losing Stanley".

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In the summer of 1867, a seventeen-year-old heir voyages half-way across the world seeking answers and acceptance he knows can't be found in his hometown. Twenty years later, Lenore Embry, a renowned spy, is contracted to travel to New York to gather information on a man accused of murdering an innocent Spanish woman. M. de V.A.LL.E. is an exploration of self-discovery, coming to terms with oneself, and the unexpected courses life almost always takes. Any feedback is fair game! Thanks!! :)

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Scott's daily routine is shattered by the arrival of Gabriel Jaeger, a teenage assassin on the run. As Gabriel hides in Scott's apartment from the hunters on his trail, he tells Scott his life story, revealing dark truths about the world they live in. I'm of course looking for general feedback, but I'd also like feedback on dialogue and scenario construction. Do the characters and what they say seem believable? And could you see this being a real, alternate future to our own? Would also love any thoughts on the narration structure.

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Kelsey James has lost her job and her parents all in one year. Now she's about to lose her innocence. Saddled with a load of emotion baggage and a maxed-out credit card, she can't believe her luck when she is hired to work at a trendy company. But the generous paycheck comes with unusual stings attached. This is a novel in progress. I'm interested in hearing how readers react to the first few chapters.

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I need all feed back on this my first attempt at an Ebook. I was thinking about Terry McDonald's Wanda while watching an episode of Stalked on the Discovery ID channel and wished someone like Wanda got to the stalker before they got to the victim...and this is what came out. Thanks for reading! dags:)

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“I had my first psychic dream when I was nine. Psychic implied power, and powerful wasn’t a word I’d use to describe myself. I couldn’t foretell the future or conjure visions at will, but I couldn’t think of a more fitting word to describe what I sometimes saw in my dreams.”

For 23-year-old Mackenzie Hill, tossing her life down the garbage disposal is easy after a painful incident shatters her life. Her heart is bleeding, and moving to Watcher’s Point is a chance to start anew, only she isn’t prepared for the guy who walks out of her dreams and into the flesh. Literally . . . because she’s been dreaming about this sexy stranger for years.

Mackenzie is even less prepared to face the dark nature of her dreams. They’ve turned disturbingly gruesome, full of blood and murder, and when they begin to coincide with the media’s headlines, she and Aidan realize her visions might be the key to stopping a madman from killing again.

Only Aidan has painful secrets of his own, and perhaps the biggest danger of all is falling for him.

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This is the third installment of the Rock Star Chronicles which began with Forbidden Fruit and follows the lives of two rock star couples and their families. Most of the characters are back. Please feel free to comment honestly. I can take it!

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Kelly Broden is a ten-year-old with a knack for trouble, but a fresh perspective on the world around her. In her wanderings she befriends the town drunk (an ex-BOI agent), witnesses a blackmailing by a mobster, and becomes a prime witness in a murder investigation. Life in small town Middleton may seem quiet and secure, but an undercurrent of evil runs through both its past and future. Chief Broden, Kelly’s father, must discover the source and put the pieces together as a rash of murders plague the nearby train depot and eventually a citizen of his town. However, he doesn’t know his daughter is hooked into this undercurrent. In her nightmares the killer presents himself as a tiger out for blood...in the end, her blood. This is the first of a Trilogy. It has not been professionally edited. I would appreciate any feedback.

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This is pretty close to done, so I'll take any feedback from general impressions to nits. If you're confused, please tell me. Thank you in advance for reading. :)

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Phyl Manning is hosting a short story contest for an anthology with elephants as the theme (see http://phylsbooks.com/?page_id=65 for details). I couldn’t decide if I should go with a family friendly story, or something a little darker. So, after a little research, I did both. Any and all nits/direction/help will be greatly appreciated.

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Phyl Manning is hosting a short story contest for an anthology with elephants as the theme (see http://phylsbooks.com/?page_id=65 for details). I couldn’t decide if I should go with a family friendly story, or something a little darker. So, after a little research, I did both. Any and all nits/direction/help will be greatly appreciated.

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For Annie and Liam, a new chapter begins under the harsh glare of the spotlight. Married now, and on the brink of divorce, they soon discover that a painful break-up isn't their biggest issue. Venomous paparazzo, Ryan O'Donnell is back. He's targeting Annie, and this time even her quick thinking, or the lucrative spoils of stardom won't put a dent in his quest for revenge. Whose Paddy Is He Anyway? is a work of romantic suspense, and is the second of three novels in the Paddy series. It's not necessary to read the first novel prior to this one, but for those returning to the story, I'd be interested in hearing what you think of the transition as well as where the story is hinting of going. For those new to the story, welcome! This is a FIRST DRAFT so there will be holes in the plot, not enough world coloring, and emotional content in need of fleshing. I plan to fix/add much of that in the edit. Feedback of all types will help give me ideas and spot those areas more easily. Thanks!

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Have you ever wondered what small town people are really like? In this unique Florida population of 2000, you'll meet off-the-chain women who deal with husband issues, crazy neighbors, addicted boyfriends, cash shortages, and church scams. I mingle the genres of mystery, romance and humor. Enjoy this redneck roller coaster ride!

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The plot of Love’s Twisted Path is from a late sixteenth century play. The purpose of this exercise is to use an established plot line and turn it into a commercial fiction novella set in modern times, i.e., the twentieth century. Some writing gurus say that popular fiction focuses on character and story. In a well-written work the author inextricably links them. Change one and the other must change with it. That said, it is the characters, not the plot that is at the heart of the success of commercial fiction. If a story is a page-turners, it is usually because the readers empathize with the protagonists so deeply they have to keep reading to find out what happens to them. Hence, I need help with character development. I also have a tendency to skip over details needed, by a reader, to follow the action. TNBW critiques have helped me spot these omissions. Of course having those who review my text note so-called nits is indispensable. I seriously appreciate each nit picked. This may not work, and I will call it a learning exercise. On the other hand, if it turns out to be first-rate this will become a serious attempt to write commercial fiction.

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Any and all feedback welcome. I have a thick skin.

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Leonora Morgan is a fifteen-year-old prodigy who has had an unusual early life. She's also an empath. In the last month, she just met her parents, who will introduce Nora to her heritage. There are more things to learn, besides what's in books: how to be a friend, a daughter - and a fiancée.

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Casey Lang is a 34-year-old lawyer whose personal life doesn't interfere with her rising star status at a large Manhattan law firm. A high-profile case with large fees will secure her career. Celebrity chef John Zambelli hires Casey after his wife has kicked him out of the house and barred him from the kids, courtesy of a court order. As the case escalates into a full-blown custody battle, Casey and John’s attorney-client relationship heads into mea culpa territory. Casey is on a fast track to self-destruction. But she can't forget that in a custody case, there are kids to consider.

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I'm thinking this is a summer read...but I'm not sure because I'm all over the place. When the normal life Ray always wanted unravels, this type-A accountant has to come to terms with the fact that normal was never in her best interest. Anything in brackets[] is something I am unsure of & would love input on. I'm disabling the chapters as I prepare to rewrite them starting 2/13/13.

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This novella has 13 short chapters (plus an epilog) and a main character who is batshit crazy. :) I'm having trouble deciding which genre to pitch this as, but suspense fits pretty well. All suggestions, feedback, and comments are greatly appreciated.

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