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Really struggling trying to learn formatting/ punctuation but I simply don't 'get it.' I study.. still don't 'get it.' Maybe this isn't for me... at least beyond simply writing for self. Some of my frustrations put into words. I decided on throwing the towel in on trying to figured out the 'proper' punctuation.. or format. Just went with reading it aloud and what felt best. Any and all suggestions. The thoughts come so easily but execution is a brick wall..

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Fast flowing thoughts typed as fast as I could Some may turn into poetry while some may grace the waste basket:) Any and all feedback

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This one came from a minor case of writer's block. It proves that most anything can get the mojo working again. Even when it should just be quiet. Comments welcome, of course.

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Trying this again. Deleted old one. This piece was written after reading Odin piece about imagination being such a friend. What would I do without writing.. reading other writers?

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Ok! Yes! I can hear the siren wailing... I know they are comin fer me... my marbles are scattering my nerves are shattering.. not flattering... my sanity is splattering ... So suck it up... read and review it anyway! Hey, not all I read are masterpieces either! BUT I read em... I review em.. Haaaaa.... haaaaa ha..... Uh.. what is that your handing me? If it make you smile just a tad... that is the feed back desired.

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Trying to find my footing again... I admit to not understanding rules etc of poetry. TRYING at my late age to grasp but until then I sort of try 'singing' the lines? This is about this actual morning and the scene outside my living room window. Any and all feedback is welcome ... I listen and learn. WEll, at least I try to learn.. :)

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Too bad there's not a lost and found department for those lines that seem to disappear in the night. Comments welcome.

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Some words have sounds that are just plain unpleasant. One of them came to mind when I was buying seafood a couple weeks ago. Comments welcome.

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This one went its own way and came from some place just shy of 3 a.m. Comments welcome

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How to pick the proper genre for something like this? Diary entry? A 'feel sorry for self spiel?" :) I just hope others realized the power they hold in their hands and hearts to hurt others. So perhaps in sharing? I dunno.. nor is it truly important.. This is just my sharing of all the years I have spent on this planet.. No need for reviews as most likely many of you have experienced the same thus knows this writer understands.. The obligation to walk a very thin line as to not hurt another. We can't undo but we can say.. sorry.. I would imagine all are guilty of this at sometime in their life.

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OKAY.. If you have read or reviewed this.. I am not asking for reviews.. I just read it for some reason and laughed at some of my first offerings. Especially this summary! haaaaa have no writing education beyond (highschool)so know I have so much to learn. Especially regarding (puncuation) haaaaaaaaaaa......aaaaagggghhhhh I blame it on two head injuries but it has always been difficult for me. Content I always got praise.. received the (hightes) haaaaa of praise. Just be gentle as I am fragile.... only kidding! My work is about myself as a child and how I feel about other children with similar childhoods. Hopefully it touches those who feel unheard or seen I did touch it up a bit but have no illusions anymore regarding the work this needs. I will work on format later but not up to trying to figure it out Any suggestions on that though sure would be appreciate. I am not sure what to even classify this as anymore.. Lord, I thought I was sooooooooooo good when I wrote this! :) Sorry, but got the giggles! haaaaaaaaaa...

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Over the past few weeks my poetry reading has been focused on modern Irish writers. I found particular value in Brendan Kennelly and this little set was inspired by lines of his, in three different poems. Comments welcome.

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composition, clarity, poetic strength/weakness Doing this in IPad may be a mistake!

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All feedback is welcome. Technical is desired as weak point. This is a simple piece about 'feelings' I know! Overdone subject but alas.. they do follow us closely. This is a piece that took two minutes and to be honest have no idea where it came from. This is how I write. I cannot 'create' like so many of the talented writers on this site. REVISITING THIS PIECE I SAW A LOT 'WRONG' WITH IT. Hopefully I have improved since first posting.. that is the feedback I would love to have. Improved? Not so self serving as not my intent. What I writer I feel is experienced by many.

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I republished this after editing it and hopefully tying up some loose end and correcting oversights. If you have already read it I would appreciate your taking a second look and letting me know if it is better and more edited? just leave message in Follow up in reviews.. no need to leave another..Please. Just need it combed through. Tried The MEASURE OF A MAN... KNOWING it had been used so Memphis... you are blessed! This is a humorous rant about something that irked me. But then, one knows one is a writer, when he or she takes something that rankled them and say "I can use that!" Hit me hard as went through it with Auto Crit.. edited until I couldn't think....and it most likely is full of mistakes. This is my school... TNBW I have high hopes this didn't make me TNBT The next big twit!

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Words are the components of our language. Words are finite, but the ways in which we arrange the components of this shared word bank are infinite. i am feeling rather elated as this is one of a handful of new poems i have written since max died.maybe there are a few left in me after all...

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I wrote a poem in the later fifties that won a contest in a High School Poetry contest. It was national. I have never found the piece. It is lost to me. I do remember now that it was a rather silly piece. The title was "Laughing Stars" This piece is about my first piece of writing. Any and all feedback. This was a very quick write as I thought it should be!

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Had to delete original entry to change title. Gave story away. Have added more humor and am editing as I go. Hopefully already caught a lot of problems. Dang it is hard! Blame it on Memphis! Predicting a winner already!

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Just expressing that helpless feeling when you know a soul is in peril and there is nothing you can do to help? We can all help those we know or give to organizations but once in awhile I feel the pull of a one soul so very far away, Most likely my imagination but maybe not. Maybe just a symbol of many I cannot reach nor help. Any and all feedback welcomed.

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I just had my grandmother's old Gruen watch repaired as the main spring broke so many years ago I can't remember. She was my port in the storm so to speak. I will wear the watch when I want to be near her. No sure regarding punctuation ... To go all the way through with it or leave it as is. It simply isn't meant to read too formally.

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My new husband and I love totally different music. He is a bass player of Jazz.. while I can enjoy it... he doesn't really embrace my simple need for 'gut reaction to music.' Music has been my escape through abuse and sorrow. I live within music. He lives within correctness of music I think. These are simply raw emotions I expressed after we both listened to some music. He wasn't stirred by mine and I was left wanting by his.

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A peek into the mind of Ms Flo and in a way see how she views the world. It might explain some nagging questions. "Feed back?" "Yes! I am starved!" That is a clue Not a short story nor a poem.. not even any good! This is what working at taking care of children does to an old geezer. Most likely this will grow... sort of like fungus?

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A Christmas gift to all writer on TNBW and its staff These are words that simply 'found me!' Merry Christmas to all of you! You have enriched my life in a way I cannot express! I write ... you have help me grow as a writer...

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I wrote this as a somewhat whimsical view of writing poetry. Just looking for reactions. Thanks, Rick

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alpha omega virus disease mutation

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I have been trying to encourage writers... especially poet to capture moments and put them down. While short and simple they can sometimes tell a huge story. While this is short and I understand the problematic issue of a fifty word review... buck up! ha..

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Just an idea I had. No kids today! So Flo gets to play. ha.. a very very short skit! Any and all feedback appreciated but mostly letting me know if made you laugh! If so, I did my job.

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Simple Haiku... three verses Any an all feedback...

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I'd better explain a couple of things which may have you scratching your head. Muti = Af for medicine, poison, etc etc. Sun-downer = a drink (or 3) imbibed at about the time the sun’s going down, being 5:30 – 6:30 around these parts. I look forward to comments.

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This is an attempt to portray my view of a homeless vet. I can only hope I do him justice. I don't want it to sound sappy or cliche so do your job and let me have it if I didn't capture this with the honor due. I see these men all the time in Seattle and surrounding towns. What works? What doesn't? I will rework this until it is worthy.

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Reposted at Flowing Pencil's behest. Since writing this poem, I've made it the first page of the novel, Good at Dying, also posted here on TNBW at the inspired suggestion of s_thatcher.

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Haiku nature solitary figure night seventeen syllables total

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AN EXAMPLE OF A PURER EXAMPLE OF JAPANESE HAIKU.. DEDICATED TO A REVIEWER WHO TOOK THE TIME TO TEACH ME THAT IN ITS TRUE FORM IT IS NOT TITLED NOR ARE THERE MORE THAN THREE LINES IN TOTAL. STILL MORE TO LEARN AS NOT AS SIMPLE AS I THOUGHT. MY YARD WAS FULL OF ROBINS AND WHILE I HEDGED ON THE RAVAGED OAK AS IT WAS ACTUALLY A HYDRANGEA BUSH I THOUGHT IT GAVE THE PIECE A MORE POETIC READ.

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Some words written down is some sort of order. Comments welcome.

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For Wiggy! No not an award winning piece of writing! Just a silly one from a grandmother of five celebrating two years on this site! fifty six hundred reviews so suffer through this one! ha... Play on word

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Simply observing what lies around me, overhead or underfoot. This time it was overhead. How a vision can affect creative impulse and the need to follow through. Nature, beauty, responses. any and all feedback

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Thoughts of not being. Death and dying.. reconciliation to truth. Letting words come into focus and put down without thought.

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my first cousin died recently of a drug overdose. This poem is how I dealt with the grief. I am interested in how the style is perceived as this is a comfortable writing style for me. This is the first time I have posted work on this forum and I am grateful for the reviews. I am grateful for the editing comments by kiwi & ulli as I have incorporated them into my piece. My first time listening to constructive editing advice. There maybe hope for me yet. To you other kind people, thanks for your comments. I will be sharing this poem at a family reunion today. Hopefully it will bring perspective & healing... po

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I call these 'floaters' as they are thoughts that float through my consciousness. I grab them and type them down or are forever lost! Emotional feedback as well as technical

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Chaiku Nature poem ... Thinking of 'coolness' on a hot hot day!

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Any and all feedback. Polishing hopefully ready to submit somewhere. What works.. what doesn't added a verse.

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Words we have all expressed in our own ways, words that mean different things to different people. Words can cut and words can be a balm. We have all been guilty; we have all been victims. Any and all feedback.

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Short, sweet... maybe fun? Happy New Year, and a happy year of writing to everyone!

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Feeling about writing as one of the arts. How is see creating and staying true to the vision. Daring to be so naive and perhaps a little scared to catch the vision and to do it justice. But then... isn't it in the search and the journey that the soul lies like a snare.

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My journey into the world of writing how one person inspired and lit the fire but also snuffed the flame. Finding my voice Listening harder, watching closer, feeling textures emotionally reaching hope thanksgiving for help on site. Comparing work and seeing if improving. Open and honest opinions as am taking this seriously and honestly due to a reviewer and his courage to point out the flaws.

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This is just an observation of a picture of my son,his wife and my grandson. Her gaze is hypnotic and you just want to know what she is thinking. Just want feedback on how it reads, is it clear, am I doing any better with punctuation!!!

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This was one of my practice for an exercise in acrostic. 'Figured I'd say it in the form of a "thanks" to Touch1 for being an "accidental" teacher, through the quality of his poems. And not-so-accidental-- his feedback thas always been extremely helpful, thoughtful, and thought-provoking. Tell me if I got it right, or missed the point.

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This is my submission to the Drabble Contest. I've never written a Drabble, and I had a lot of fun writing this one. I thought it would be fun to write my Drabble in rhyme... I read everything I could find on the writing of Drabbles, and I couldn't find anything to suggest that prose was the only form in which one could be written.

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Janine asked that I write something beautiful about poetry to offset my "Bleed Poet Bleed" piece.

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