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“After achieving everything in her life that she has set out to do Alexandra is left feeling empty and uninspired. Wrestling with a changing relationship with her husband of three years and a pregnancy, Alexandra finds herself on a path to self awareness that has a quickly diminishing timeline.”

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When pole dancer Laura Fisher signed up for a canoe camping trip in the wilderness, she hoped to get away from the stresses and strains of life in LA. Instead, she found herself thrust into a wilderness experience with a recalcitrant farmer, a fisherman intent on sex, and a river that had a mind of its own. Other characters include Francine, her businessman father Campbell, and Daisy - Campbell's mistress. He, unfortunately forgot to tell his daughter that his mistress was joining them in the canoe.

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“God won’t bother with plagues and floods. He’ll just send me.�? When a serial killer is murdered while in the act of enjoying his latest victim, former LAPD detective, Hale Parrish, is asked to use his supernatural talents to investigate. His search is short-lived, because the vigilante, referring to himself as “Judgment,�? tracks Hale down to reveal a life-changing secret: both of them are members of an elite bloodline created to enact divine wrath upon the wicked. While Hale decides whether his birthright is a blessing or a curse, shadows from his past emerge, forcing him to face his demons, protect his family, and take back control of his destiny.

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Synopsis: Phillip is a college student living in New Orleans who teaches karate and does magic shows to make ends meet. After two mysterious strangers sweep Phillip into a strange world where magic is real "for his own safety" Phillip is forced to use all of his fighting and sleight of hand skills just to stay alive. Will Phillip survive long enough to discover all of the secrets of his own cloudy past and why powerful forces seek his destruction? Feedback desired: This is my first attempt at a fantasy novel so I would appreciate thorough criticism and advice by those more experienced.

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Big Red comes home to roost.

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Finally a home at last.

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Two together on the long road home.

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Plum starts our story in jail, the story unfolds, telling the hiliarious and strange story of how she ended up there.

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"THE HIDDEN SCROLL" is a historical fiction on the passion of an Israeli archaeology professor in his search for an ancient scroll written in the time of the second temple of Jerusalem. The novel takes the reader on a ride accompanied by ancient parchments, coins and other artifacts. Parchments history and their discoveries are described as the thriller develops from a cave in the Galilee, a cave in the mountains of Tibet, a monastery, an excavation site in Israel, a basement in Amsterdam, a book in Castilian Spain and a new archaeological site with a dramatic discovery. Some searches encounter interference and obstacles placed by a radical Islamic organization. The novel ends with extraordinary archaeological surprises. It has 83,700 words. “THE HIDDEN SCROLL�? targets three niche readers. The prime group includes Jewish readers who love thrillers and who may be familiar with the historical events in the novel. After reading it, they most likely will tell their friends about its evolving events that occur in Jerusalem, Rome, Paris, Buenos Aires, Istanbul and other locations. The second targeted group includes Jewish and Christian readers who are interested in archaeology and history. The archaeological facet of the book is not scientific, but it includes some basics on the evaluation and dating of ancient scrolls and parchments. The third group consists of just thriller lovers. I am looking for constructive criticism to improve the impact of the introductory chapters on the reader's curiosity and his or her interest in reading additional chapters.

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***Updated on 4-22-2009 with edits. Thanks for all the feedback so far!** 19-year-old Diane Macauliffe's dreams are haunted by a walking, talking skeleton--and that's the least of her worries! First, she must survive basic training at Fort Devon's Army Base. With an inspection looming, she and fellow med-tech trainees Jack and Susie have been assigned clean-up duty in Devon's hospital morgue, which is rumored to be haunted. Jack comes up with a plan to smuggle in beer so that they can drink while they work, risking expulsion from the Army if they are caught. The three friends meet Edgar, a creepy janitor with a dark past who often lurks nearby. Edgar becomes trouble when he discovers what the young trainees--who have dubbed themselves "the morgue drinking club"--are up to. Is the morgue really haunted by ghosts, or merely by someone of flesh and blood who wants to keep them away? Diane must also face the thing she is most afraid of--the repressed memory of the way her father died. Along the way, she learns that she is not alone. After all, everyone's afraid of something; some of us are just better at hiding it than others. This is a young adult novel for readers ages 14 and up. I would like feedback on what works in this story and what doesn't, and how it could be made better. I think the characters are solid and I'm happy with the dialogue (however, please feel free to disagree--one agent commented that he thought the female characters sounded too old for 19, but I think their dialogue rings true. I'd be interested to learn what other writers think). I think the plot needs tightening, and I'm concerned that there may be too many times in the book where the characters are just talking--are these scenes boring? Also, I suspect that the plot may need more tension to drive it forward--maybe more creepy scenes with Edgar and Diane? Finally, does the plot go off on too many tangents? Any suggestions and feedback on these and other aspects of the book would be welcome.

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A novel based on the Author's own true story. It is a story of her enthusiasm pursuing her goal to publish her writing in the US after she moved there, though English was not her mother tongue. She faced many other challenges while achieving her goal. (I appreciate every input I get to help me improve my writing, especially any grammatical mistakes. Thank you)

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Thirteen-year-old Tyler Bradley is sent to stay in Moon Bay at his aunt and uncle's chip shop. Nothing in the antiquated seaside town is what he expected. The chip shop is decorated with strange symbols, there are gigantic, primeval birds nesting in the cliffs and, worst of all, he discovers a sad and horrible story attached to the gothic mansion at the tip of the headland. When Tyler meets skateboarder, Jenner, they join forces to get to the bottom of the mysteries permeating the town. The problem is working out just which townfolk are working for the agents of good and which are working for the agents of darkness. And in this confusing atmosphere, how does Tyler know he can trust his aunt and uncle, after all, their chip shop is called, Wish and Chips... This novel is intended for 10-14 year olds and I would value any feedback, thanks.

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The territory is the individual; the population: thoughts; populated locations are various states of mind. Rulers of regions are dominant desires. In one particular region, the rulers form a dynasty of powerful desires that drive the individual until creative and perceptual awareness are slaves and descendants of generations of slaves fed on the dregs of frustration. The ruler and leaders dominate ideas and actions through ruthless coercion. One day an idea tore itself from the nothingness of being that the ruler had created and said, “Enough! This mind has had enough!�? The deliberately destructive habits, driven by the ruthless ruler, attacked. The fight is fast and intense. And in the lull after the battle, the Spirit and the agitated Flesh has reached an agreement. They are united in the knowledge that there has to be an exodus, and a journey to the Promised Land… The battle effects a transformation in an individual that creates a striking new person. The Call and Development of that person is an exact replay of the Exodus process from the Call and Assignment of Moses through Egypt, the wilderness and into the Promised Land. A thought like Moses enters the region and addresses the ruler and the leaders and demand that the oppressed of the region are to be set free. The process is related to the Biblical account of the Exodus out of Egypt and the journey to the Promised Land. Chronologically, the time is 500 years after Columbus. Geographically the hypothetical state is the locale of the historically fortunate survivors of the dreadful Middle Passage. The hypothetical Egypt, the wilderness and the Promised Land are states of being. In this setting of limitless possibilities, a schoolteacher makes one of the world’s greatest spiritual discoveries since Moses turned aside to see the burning bush. The Exodus Papers, Exodus 500: The First Generation, Copyright 2009 by Glenwood A. Lawrence; Strongest Start Three

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Victorian Conwell, the owner of one of the most successful and unusual businesses on the west coast has her hands, and the hands of everyone she knows, full. A gifted teleporter with a complicated past she finds herself in the middle of a conspiracy that will take her and the members of her corporation all over the globe and into the pits of hell. Follow Victorian as old loves clash with current obligations sending her life into a tailspin the world will never forget.

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The grottos of New York City can be a terrifying place for any twenty-five year old, especially for a recent Ivy League drop-out, especially when you’ve been spoon-fed caviar since the cradle. In his final year at Amherst, Ethan Elliot—privileged heir to the QuikClean dynasty—flees New England, abandons a promising future at a top financial firm and moves into a loft on the outskirts of Williamsburg, Brooklyn in hopes of finding something “greener.�? What he finds is anything but. Instead, he’s hurtled far from the boroughs of New York on a life-altering, cross-country, roller-coaster ride into the bowels of Middle America with Jules and Wolfgang, his just-as-lost tour guides, each of them towing their own trunk-full of emotional “drag-age.�? They take off in a derelict Chevy Chevelle expecting to find Jules’ deceased biological mother, Lisa; themselves, and the world they once knew. What they don’t expect is to be taken hostage by a schizophrenic family member that none of they have ever met. However, it’s not until they come upon Lisa’s Law: an edict of good will penned by the namesake to “make a long-lasting impression on at least one other life, for the better�? that the central theme begins to surface. The Law of Lilies is a character driven, coming of age story about forgiveness, survival, and our redemption as a human race. It takes the reader through Ethan’s slapdash, and often times frightening view of today’s America. But more than simply a story about a character’s fruition; at approximately 60,000 words, it’s a challenge to the reader to make the world a more beautiful place, regardless of the ugliness of one’s past. Thrid round draft. Looking for any advice: creative, technical, what have you.

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Gioia (Joy-ah) got Karl Baron’s attention. She’s hot, young and gorgeous, a perfect match for movie star royalty like Karl, but is he willing to wait in line with all the men in Gioia’s colorful life? With her first screenplay ready to roll, Gioia travels to her grandparent’s hometown in Sicily. All the problems she left there twelve years ago, come back to haunt her. And some new troubles follow her there.

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Would like to know if people find it humorous, how I could improve on it or any feedback you desire

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Here's what I hope is the beginning of the last edit (pre-publishing-wise), so what do you think? Would you check it out at the library? Buy a copy? Are the characters well defined? How's the pacing?

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Summary: Mark flies from Rome to become Australian High Commissioner in Lagos in August 1965, just as violence erupts there, Ian Smith unilaterally declares independence for Rhodesia and “Winds of Change�? continue to sweep through Africa. A military coup, for which “six Ibo majors�? are blamed, overthrows the Federal Government of Nigeria in January 1966, killing the Prime Minister, a celebrated Muslim leader in the north and others, mostly northerners, to the apparent advantage of the Ibos. In July, the northerners take their revenge in a counter coup and savagely massacre thousands of Ibos. A million Ibo refugees flee to their homeland in the Eastern Region. Mark mediates between new head of government Gowon and charismatic leader of the Ibos, Ojukwu. As the world media watch, Mark talks to Ojukwu in his capital Enugu, raising hopes of a peaceful settlement. Mark travels to other African countries talking to their heads of government; but “things fall apart�?. Ojukwu declares an independent state of Biafra, civil war breaks out and “brother�? fights “brother.�? Most Great Powers support Gowon with arms and supplies. Disease, starvation, bombing and military action kill a million Ibo men, women and children. The OAU, the Commonwealth and the United Nations do little but watch the genocidal-style slaughter. At the United Nations in New York, Mark is helpless. Ojukwu’s army surrenders in January 1970. Biafra dies, others plunder its oil in ways that corrupt the country and destroy traditional industries. In 1973, Mark returns to Nigeria on a “Goodwill Mission�?. He meets Gowon again. Peace reigns. Biafra is only a memory – an especially bitter memory to Ibos who still suffer oppression and discrimination. The world takes little notice. It has other worries, other conflicts, other crimes and corruptions in which some can selfishly rejoice and to which others must grudgingly attend… Feedback: Comment/criticism of any kind welcome, including comment on content, literary quality and readability.

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Jessica if fleeing her psychopathic husband. Along with her seven year old daughter Meagan, she decides to start a new life in the small town of Hope Springs, Oklahoma. The only problem is a pack of werewolves are secretly killing people in the area. Ebon Moon is a chilling novel of werewolf terror.

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Contemporary novel with a lot of historical elements from the time of the Habsburg rule of Austria. In involves romance, intrigue, and murder.

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Jill Hardman uses the ancient bush remedy of swallowing three red seeds to bring on a miscarriage in an effort to save her career in the mining industry. During the seven day wait for the remedy to work her resolve begins to wane.

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Having just been killed in a mysterious shuttle explosion, Gethin Bryce is back to figure out why. Bryce is an unusually gifted investigator with the Global Republic; due to his proximity to the shuttle tragedy, he finds himself assigned to the case. Bryce's investigation takes him from the luxurious enclaves of Earth’s elite to the battered Wastelands beyond civilization’s protective thrall. Linking up with a planet-spanning corporate powerhouse, he also befriends a grim outlander named Celeste Segarra. She has an important piece of the puzzle – proof of a sadistic entity from Earth's unremembered past which threatens not just civilization, but all life... Everywhere.

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*** THIS IS THE SEQUEL To KINGS & QUEENS *** Still reeling from the repercussions of the church shooting plot she got jerked into ten years ago in high school, Majesty is shattered, having also lost her daughter, Mikayla, in a preschool gas explosion and her marriage to a slut. So, when she receives a bizarre glimmer of hope that her little girl might actually be alive, she fights heaven and hell to reclaim the happiness that’s been stripped from her. But her hunt sets five others on a collision course with disaster: Crystal, an eleven-year-old who’s trying to escape a hellish facility filled with mindless kids, her fifteen-year-old sister, Skye, who’s out to expose the supposed magical secret society at her high school, her former best friend, Vivien, an art therapist, who hopes to unlock her daughter’s turmoil as she suddenly stopped speaking and began slipping into catatonic states and drawing gruesome pictures, and Chance, a guy imposing as a wealthy recluse while trying to recall his forgotten past and eliminate his enemies. In their dark world, nothing is what it seems and these seekers of truth may not like the answers they find. And little Mikayla could very well be trapped in this web of deception … or truly gone forever.

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STARSPEAKER is a historical fiction novel which begins against the backdrop of ancient China during one of the most brutal reigns in China's long history. It is a tale of civilization, serendipity, and individuals and is divided into five "scrolls" or units. Thanks, and please enjoy!

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A young woman tries to untangle herself from the complications of her mother's life after her mother commits suicide. She finds this difficult to do, however, when she and her brother discover an adopted sibling. As truths about her mother's life become clearer, Melissa struggles to make sense of her own choices.

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Okay, I am going to try to give this a run again after taking a nine month break which resulted in a forey into humor writing. This is the third time I have changed my opening chapter. I need to know if this hooks you or not. Any ideas and nits are appreciated. Happy Reading, Lost Soul

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The world is ending. The signs are evident. Desperation and fear have infiltrated every level of life. Henry can feel it coming. His fellow math teacher has figured out the date through a complex mathematical formula involving the length of a 1964 pinto multiplied by the average bust size of all playmates from 1985 through 1995. Henry’s wife has returned with a message from the The Pastor: God is angry. His son has built his own world in the basement with milk cartons and thousands of pictures of strangers. His dad is dying. It’s Christmas. He’s been torturing eighth grade bullies who tortured fellow students. The world is ending.

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On the world of Guya… In an age of darkness… A time when the Inquisition raged and the Church of the All Father sent Inquisitors and Witch Hunters into the lands to burn witches. One such witch was named Sundra. Sentenced to death by fire, she escapes her fate with the aid of a mysterious swordsman named Jorn. Together they must forge a bond as Sundra takes the oath to be the next Oathbearer and wield the powerful Sword of Balance to destroy the church and save the world from an ancient and unholy evil.

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Things are not always black and white, sometimes they are the color of love.

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This is the tale of janitor Adam Fink's foray into the world of psychotherapy when he hijacks his own psychiatrist's practice when his doctor goes on an extended sabbatical. This is a slapstick, sometimes sarcastic look at the world of psychiatry from the eyes of the doctor. Come in have a couch and watch as a not too bright Janitor bocomes a doctor overnight. Watch as he and his partners, a hooker and a lawyer take the world by storm. I would like to know how this rates on the funny scale, 1 being not funny at all and 10 being hillarious. If you have any ideas on how to improve this I am all ears. Thank you for stopping by, and happy reading. Lost Soul

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Blood Moon is the purported memoir of Pontius Pilate's spymaster, bagman and political fixer, the outrageous and flamboyant Artemidorus Scipio. He narrates his version of events during the Gospel period in the Roman province of Judaea including his deadly encounter with Jesus and other events he regards as far more important - such building an Aqueduct and seducing a certain Jewish Princess.

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When Angel Lafayette, a female Lieutenant of mixed race in the US Air Force, volunteers for a top-secret DARPA time travel experiment, she expects to be fast forwarded five minutes in 2008 not sent hurtling to a distant time. Before long she is in trouble, in love and history (as we know it) is gone with the wind.

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