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¿Maybe a Foreword in the "Waking up with the Mules" collection I'm trying to conflate?

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Ever wonder what it's like to kill someone from half a mile away? Neither did this guy... I'd appreciate any feedback!

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I have revised this story a bit and am re-posting it. I'm preparing it for submission. Any and all comments will be appreciated. Thanks!

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Ally's biggest problem wasn't that she couldn't get to the altar for her wedding--It was working her way through the land of M before anyone notices she's gone.

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A young adventurous brother and sister like to take big chances hiking in the mountains of North Carolina. This time it might cost them their lives.

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This short story is based on an event that happened on my family's ranch in Eastern Oregon about a century ago, in which 30 horses were killed in a barn fire. I've taken the liberty to imagine the event, weaving around the few details of which I have knowledge. J.W. was my grandfather. I write non-fiction, primarily personal essays and memoir. This is my first and possibly last work of fiction, and my first introduction to 'The Next Big Writer'. If you have the patience to read to the end, thank you. (Be kind.)

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This is my first fiction short story I wrote in English about a girl who doesn't know what she is doing, stealing her friend's stuff without any purposes. The title I give in this story is as the conclusion of the end of the story. True or not, let the readers give their judgements. (Any feedback, including grammars and tenses will be accpeted. Thank you and enjoy my story!)

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A homeless wino is challenged by a fellow street person to perform a simple task: to use his wit and the resources of the street to prepare a meal of rice. Salty fails at the task but still finds a glimmer of hope that he may rebuild his life. This posting is a contest entry, but if anyone cares to give any sort of feedback, it would be welcome.

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Any advice relished. Trying out for the Mezzo so appreciate advice on whether I've met the brief... but most of all, did I entertain you? I have a feeling this is incomplete but I sometimes get too close to my story to tell. 1368 words.

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The specter of divorce looms over the leader of a group of neighborhood kids. I had changed the title to "Wish Rock" and then changed it back again--I'd like feedback on which title works better for the story. As far as the story itself, any and all feedback welcome, and feel free to be tough!

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One story in the Pirate's Bedtime Collection.--nothing technical, just a fun exercise I'm doing as I read through the Pirate Primer.

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Eccentricity and isolation shows in the lives of two people who are strangers to one another, until a fateful meeting at The Cave changes everything.

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Teen changes mind after some reflection

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Let's just say about 80 percent of it is based on a true story and leave the rest to your imagination. LOL -- Feedback: Not looking for anything really technical. Just a fling of a story for the contest.

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This is a short essay I wrote a (long) time ago about the first day of my first job.

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A night at karaoke has a twist. Any comments would be helpful. Thanks. Vern PS: This has been revised and expanded. The alternative ending is now the only one included.

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All comments welcome, especially your emotional response to the story, and what I can do to make it better. Tweaked for the contest.

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This is the first version of Horns, the 'talking' version. A mother protects her son from the ever present threat of hunters. I've had this version likened to a children's story, though some felt the morals were coming off as a bit preachy. A second version, one without any animal dialogue, and an added scene, can be found here: http://www.thenextbigwriter.com/library/index.html/read/32283

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This is the second version of Horns. The only dialogue is spoken by the human characters, and the dove scene was replaced by two new ones. A mother protects her son from the ever present threat of hunters. The original version can be found here: http://www.thenextbigwriter.com/library/index.html/read/32364

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This is the story of a wolf pack in Alaska

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A tropical vacation is suppose to be warm. Sometimes it can also be hot.

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The story of how Blue Ruby, Virginia, got it's name.

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A story can take you anywhere.

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Better title? Grateful for all suggestions.

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My father taught me, now he's teaching my nephews and grandnephews. Time I gave him back proof I learned.

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I am new to the short story form and appreciate all feedback. Don't be shy with any critiques, I can take them and want to improve! This story is designed to be entertaining and humorous, but it actually examines some serious societal problems. Examples: 1. The law favoring form over the substance and merits of a case. 2. Government programs that are designed to help people, but whose requirements are so complex that people cannot figure them out without help. Did these points come out clearly enough in the story? Legalese to English: -Plaintiff: person bringing the claim -Defendant: person defending the claim -Statu[t]e of limitations: A legal rule that extinguishes the right to a claim if the person waits more than a set amount of time to bring it. -Lexis: A legal publishing company that provides research tools for lawyers -affidavit: A formal written statement of facts by a person signed under oath. -Habeas Corpus: A legal action to seek relief from unlawful detention.

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A nine-year-old boy befriends his ailing great-aunt and fears losing her. Many thanks to all who have given valuable feedback so far; much appreciated!

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This story is true, a few names have been changed to avoid total neighborhood warfare, although "Herman" has left town already. I guess what I was trying to convey was how surprised I was when this took place. I guess I want to know if anyone finds this humorous and what I could do to improve the story. I would like know what positive things you bring out of it and the negative as well.

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jpy to the world

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The gift of love

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Peace on earth and goodwill toward men.

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A feast on Christmas eve.

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Home is where the heart is, especially on Christmas eve.

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No one should be alone on Christmas eve.

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Never kiss a fool until you've washed your hands.

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Rupert and the ladies of the night tango till dawn!

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Rupert sets sail on the S.S. Queen for a day.

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