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Mr. Sick is about a very sick man.

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Just a few suggestions about writing sex scenes in fiction.

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This is a major re-write of the novel based on the great feedback I've received from reviewers here. The first chapter is entirely new, and I've decided to delay the introduction of a couple of the characters a bit because I got the impression the back and forth was confusing some readers. I think this is essentially a chick lit story, but I've received some great feedback from the men here, so guys, please don't be scared off. Nicole is a single working mother in her late thirties. At the beginning of the novel she finds that she is pregnant with the child of her younger, unemployed live-in boyfriend. As the story progresses, we find out how she deals with the pregnancy, learn more about how she came to be in this seemingly dead-end relationship and why she stays, and ultimately get to see her create the life she's always dreamed of, but not without some hurdles along the way. Review wise, I am interested in any and all feedback, from the smallest nits to comments on story flow, dialogue, etc. Feel free to jump in and review any chapter -- I don't mind if you don't start at the beginning.

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Donnie Dare is lured to an encounter that changes her life.

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A story about a female partner at a law firm in Dallas and a male associate that is working with her. I am new here, so any feedback is appreciated. I am not a writer and this is my first attempt at writing a story.

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Oh no! Another romance novel from a lady that can't finish the first one she started. This is my NaNo project and I will admit right now that it's raw and has no editing. I'm going with the flow and writing it before editing, or I'm afraid I'll get too hard on myself and abandon it. All crit toward what I need to edit will be very much appreciated. Allison Crawford is a waitress living the simple life, always pushing her dreams to the side. When a tradgedy throws Lane Bishop into her life, nothing will ever be the same.

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This a actually a novella I hope to sell as an ebook. Some parts are most explicit and I won't be in the least offended if readers skip over some of that. But I'd like to ferret out the typos, grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors and any lapses in logic. It's meant to be funny, so if the jokes fall flat please say so.

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This a actually a novella I hope to sell as an ebook. Some parts are most explicit and I won't be in the least offended if readers skip over some of that. But I'd like to ferret out the typos, grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors and any lapses in logic. It's meant to be funny, so if the jokes fall flat please say so.

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This a actually a novella I hope to sell as an ebook. Some parts are most explicit and I won't be in the least offended if readers skip over some of that. But I'd like to ferret out the typos, grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors and any lapses in logic. It's meant to be funny, so if the jokes fall flat please say so.

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I would like to start submitting this to publications such as Ladies Home Journal, Reader's Digest and Oprah, but have discovered that our parents told us nothing but the truth - you will go blind if you continuously edit stories about masturbation. Any help I can get will be appreciated. Perhaps if you read it quickly you won't grow hair on your palms.

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This a actually a novella I hope to sell as an ebook. Some parts are most explicit and I won't be in the least offended if readers skip over some of that. But I'd like to ferret out the typos, grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors and any lapses in logic. It's meant to be funny, so if the jokes aren't working, please say so.

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This novel-length memoir details the growth and emotional shifts that occur when a thirtysomething woman decides to turn her husband's sexual fantasy into reality. While there will certainly be some vivid descriptions of sex as the story progresses, it is intended for a mainstream audience. The more detailed the critique, the better. I can take it!

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This is a draft of a story that i have been wanting some feedback on, so please let me know what you think.

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In the forum, R.A. Keene posted a website for mature writers and Mishmont suggested someone should write some geriatric erotica. Then she just had to challenge Dill and me to rewrite the famous staircase scene from Gone With the Wind. I'd love to see a version by Dill, but until that time, my apologies to Margaret Mitchell. I've quoted the poor woman several times in this story. A bit of info for those who never read Scarlett. Rhett and Scarlett did get back together and had a child named Cat. Hmmmm...I'd be about the right age. Har! I'm not sure if they ever remarried but I'm assuming they did. They are married in my story. They planned to travel the world and I'm also assuming that's what they have been doing all these years. Thanks Bob and Michelle!

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A historical romance set in Elizabethan England. This heroine and her hero are forced to marry; one to carry on the family name, the other to prevent poverty. He hates all women, she can't stand him. Their passion ignites and we're swept along in their relationship as it reaches the heights of love and plummits to an intense hate. Their love is put to the test and together they survive an adventure that nearly shakes their world and takes their lives. Theirs is a love that rivals the best and grows into a long, heated passion. I am looking for any sort of feedback, on writing style, tension, drama, plot-building, dialogue, etc...

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Valarie has lived a loveless life of compromise. Everyone she's every cared for has lied and hurt her. But she stumbles upon a piece of paper that puts her life in danger. In the race to save her life, she finds the courage and strength to finally be free of the pain she has held inside of her for so long. Warning: sexual content

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I posted this a long time ago and dragged it out again in honor of Sumthiniwrote's brilliant piece "Brosna's Double Dog Dare", which everyone should take a look at as an example of fine writing under pressure. "Perspective" is jointly written with a good friend of mine. A few years ago we had one date and I sent him the beginning and middle of this piece and he sent me back his perspective of the date. "Dysfunctional Dating" could have just as easily been the title of this piece.

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When three childhood friends grow up together, in Clearwater Florida, they realize they share more then being best of friends. They share a serial killer whose on the lose. When they find out their the next victims on his list, there friendship teaches them the meaning of life, and what it means to fight to stay alive, not only for themselves, but for each other. For Jennifer, Gail and Liz, life has always been fun. The three of them have always done what they wanted, without giving much thought to anything else. Being so much alike, yet different, the three of them shared everything, from growing pains, to broken hearts, graduation, to college and finally their own independence. Now as the serial killer closes in, he leaves clues behind, for the three of them, and suddenly they find themselves at odds with one another, pointing their finger at anyone and everyone, including the three new men in their life. When they’re forced to face the demons from their past, they learn to trust one another all over again, as it becomes evident that their only hope of survival is to stick together and keep their eyes open, and Don’t Blink.

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Jane Anderson had a good job, a nice apartment and a loving boyfriend. But her life was about to be shattered by the deception of the man she thought she loved. Then she met Alison Roscoe. Little did she know it, but Jane was about to be plunged into a world of sexual experimentation and depravity from which she may never recover. Experimentation that was as powerful as any drug.....and just as hard to escape from.

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STOP RIGHT HERE! If you are easily offended by foul language, sexual acts, degradation of women, the slaughter of animals and/or politics don't read this. Otherwise, dive right in and see what I deal with on a daily basis.

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The first line of this story is the absolute truth. It has been suggested that when I originally posted this I rambled a bit too much. While working to correct that, it seems I've taken rambling to new levels. I would ask any reviewer who cares, to come up for a name for my UOE.

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Carly was a well educated and well-balanced young woman, but her relationships always ended in disaster. Her good friend Michael had all the answers, but would Carly be brave enough to trust him?

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I have often wondered if telephone operators don't become tired of the verbal abuse they have to endure? Please give me feedback on the style in which this is written, does it work for this piece? I have revised the end. I was starting to feel sorry for mister Abrahams myself, lol.

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After a writing class in which we discussed how to write about sex (street terms vs anatomical), I came home and wrote this piece of nonsense using every anatomical term I could find. Strictly for fun. Rphil205

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i was gonna do a PICTO of an innocent nagging wagging sorta tongue ...but it somehow turned out as a ruder mouth shagging version!

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This is something I wrote right after reading Robert Hass' "Privilege of Being." The idea of angels looking down from heaven and watching 2 people having sex made me think of sadder or a less elevated account of a sexual encounter. I really couldn't think of a title for this because it seemed so experiential that a title would place it in some category I didn't want it to be in. This is the first work I have ever felt brave enough to publish anywhere so please be honest about whether it is worth reading or not.

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I'm such a sweet person until I sit down in front of a keyboard. My latest target? Narcissistic pretty boys.

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What do you think of this poem? How does it flow? I plan to submit this one.

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The working title of this novel is Corporate Samurai "love begets hate, trust begets betrayal, lust leads to death"// This novel takes place in the mid to late 1970's in the US and Japan. Bill Sanford is a young CPA working for the Kentucky Fried Chicken Corporation. He was brought up as a Foreign Service brat and had spent three years in Japan. He had dreams of an international career but, his wife would have no part of it.// Ray Easton, KFC's Regional VP, Far East, is a cunning scoundrel and consummate liar. Ray is a master of insider trading of stock, and spreads the wealth to gain favors. He has always stayed one step ahead of the law.// Mike Adachi is an executive with one of Japan's major trading companies. He was raised in San Francisco and speaks English as a native. He launches a plot to bring a major US fast food company into the Japanese market, relying on a complex chain of industrial espionage.// Strategic Planning is taking corporate America by storm. KFC'S CEO has caught the bug. He brings in two hot shots to produce and lead a corporate-wide Strategic Planning initiative. Resistance to strategic planning and the new hot shots builds, and the corporate politics accelerate, with battle lines being drawn.// Japan has been through post war reconstruction and is becoming a world class economic power. Some of its former military leaders are determined to achieve economically, what they failed to accomplish militarily.// Two trading company giants, Mitsubishi and Sumitomo, become embroiled in a struggle for dominance of the exploding, western style, fast food market.// The cultural differences between Japan and the US complicate matters for both sides. The inner workings of Corporate America and Japan are revealed in all their successes, but also, their corruption and greed.// Personal conflicts and deep seated vendettas, some originating during World War II, unfold.// Seduction and love affairs are an integral part of the plot. They illustrate the differences in social views of sexuality between the East and West.// Industrial espionage involving two highly competitive US fast food companies, two Japanese Zaibatsu and the Japanese and Mexican underworld unfolds.//The head of the Yakuza (Japanese mafia)is an effective eliminator of problem people.// Many of the key characters were involved in WWII and their individual experiences influence their business behavior.// Cultural differences subtly emerge, and the exploitation of others to achieve one's ends is front and center.// Personal ethics, or the lack there of, and the constant tug between good and evil are interspersed throughout. View table of contents..

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This poem was influenced By one of Sonny's poems posted here. I have placed it in PG- Parental Guidance Required, because of the subject matter. It is my wish that one day we will be able to discuss sex openly and honestly without shame. Especially with our children.

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1-900 girl describes her regular customer.

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ON HOLD. I've got some serious re-working of this to do. But any crit while I'm doing it is still appreciated in a big way!

Things are about to change in a big way... ///

Aggie Wilson is a realistic, responsible ED nurse who values her job and her family. In her world, there isn't time for the fantastic and anything out of the ordinary only exists in books and movies. That is, until she meets North Anthony - a self-proclaimed Vampire Hunter with a stake in his belt and a sexy smirk on his face. ///

North comes barreling into her life one night long past midnight, when Aggie is shaking off the fatigue of another work day and preparing to go home to her only relationship at the moment: her crazy cat. Arrogant and enigmatic, North saves her from a vampire and drags her off to parts unknown, turning everything Aggie knows upside down and inside out - including her lackluster sex life. ///

Their chemistry is instantaneous, but not enough to keep them alive when the vampires come knocking. North will keep Aggie safe at all costs, but his dedication to his hunting might keep her too safe - from him and from a chance at true love.///

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During 1939 in London, a new type of spying device has been presented, by its inventor, to Unit Five, a British intelligence unit. Unit Five's problem is to find a willing candidate to carry it inside Germany, while pretending to be a German Army officer. A desperate search ensues with lots of complications. But, when a volunteer arrives in Nazi Germany, just prior to war breaking out, extremely unusual coincidental events occur. The sex-starved wife of a German Army General ensnares the young British spy as a bed mate. From then on, a detailed plot unravels involving treachery, treason, sex and murder.

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Most historians list Princess Noor Inayat Khan as one of the most intriguing heroines of the Twentieth Century and rank her up near the top along with Mata Hari. She was born inside the Kremlin during 1914 and evolved from infancy into an emotional, naive, careless and beautiful young woman ... hardly the attributes of a future spy. This novel is based upon true events during the years 1914-1944. While being brought up in France, Princess Noor clandestinely falls in love with Paulo. He is torn from her arms after being drafted, during 1935, into the Italian army to fight in Ethiopia and she spends the next eight years trying to discover his whereabouts while he is constantly sent to other danger zones in North Africa, Spain and Russia.

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NEWS FLASH; panda on a diet because female can't get comfortable with his excess weight

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She is a woman who has awakened from a long dream-filled sleep in cryogenic freeze and must to get to New York. She has someone special to meet before New Year's Eve . . . and carry out the final part of a long awaited plan to escape her old life and live happily ever after.

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We're six years into the 21st century and guys, it sucks to be you. There are lots of reasons why and Starbuck MacIntyre has a lot to say about it. Want to reclaim your masculinity? Tired of women trying to change you? Sick of psycho ex-girlfriends who call you when you're gettin' some with someone else? Got a girlfriend who reads chick-lit and who might be addicted to "Sex and the City?" This read is for you!

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here's another experiment --a depiction of bossoms broadly in the realms of erotica ....a teeny-weeny bit rude!

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yes, this is about BJ as in 'blow job' ....experimental, tongue in cheek (of course), fairly explicit, rude and bordering on the crude ....you have been warned!!!

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Warning: this novel has at least four levels, is full of sex and violence, and is very fast paced. The Well of Women is at risk, as is the Tourney which Rhiannon wishes to use for pride and peace. But there are riots against offworlders, who the people blame for the rash of mother hate that is spreading through the land. And there is the mysterious Maelan--supposed guardian of the Well, whose malfunction may explain the evil that is afoot.

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My lightly philosophical rant regarding the phenomenon of (ahem) "yawning" during the act of "sleeping," inpired by Dill Carver's piece, "Seminar." I just edited this, adding some context as to my secret code words, per the suggestions of my early reviewers.

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“When the need arises, God won’t bother with plagues and floods. He’ll just send me.” Someone is murdering L.A.’s most depraved criminals. As a favor to the LAPD, former drug-runner, turned cop, turned millionaire playboy, Hale Parrish, agrees to use his supernatural talents to investigate. His search is short-lived when the vigilante, referring to himself as “Judgment,” tracks Hale down to reveal a life-changing secret: both of them are members of an elite bloodline chosen to enact God’s wrath upon the wicked. While Hale decides whether his birthright is a blessing or a curse, shadows from his criminal past emerge, forcing him to face his demons, protect his family, and reclaim control of his destiny. At 90,000 words, Light of Judgment is a dark, gritty, fast-paced thriller with spiritual undertones.

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In 1957, a supposed Brazilian friend with an ulterior motive lures a young American to Brazil in order to take advantage of a get-rich-quick-scheme. Brian Scherer swallows the bait, and plunges into an adventurous odyssey. But step-by-step after his arrival in South America, he becomes entangled in a web of treachery, smuggling, sexual romps, plus an international kidnapping, all of which, causes a bitter diplomatic confrontation between the United States and Brazil.

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