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Krudges and the Cybernetic Girl is the first book in the The Girl Who Lost the Earth Trilogy. The Girl Who Lost the Earth Novel I posted earlier is the same as this version, except this is broken into smaller chapters for easier review and edit. In regard to footnotes, they are for the reviewers convenience and would be a popup in an e-book. In a printed book I would put them in a a glossary.

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This is a new sci-fi series I'm working on. I'm planning as I write, so really have no idea where it is going to go. Any and all feedback or suggestions are welcome. :) Ang

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An ordinary conspiracy theorist uncovers a lot more than he bargained for, and is thrust into life as an operative of the "Cartographers", an organization spanning multiple universes dedicated to maintaining order.

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Born a lowly Settler, sixteen-year-old Wil isn't supposed to have the gift, but he does. Like the Great One himself, he can peep into the minds of those around him, probing every hidden thought. The gift has transformed his life, lifting him from a Settler's Camp to the Guardian Academy - an elite school where children like him learn how to use their power. He's been taught that Guardians are a force for good, charged with protecting the people of Neoden from the evil of selfish thought. But when he and his fellow cadets come under attack, those beliefs are shattered. Why would the Settlers he's been sent to protect want to kill him? When a voice from the past reaches out to him, he's forced to face a new and terrifying possibility: maybe powerful evil still exists in the world. And maybe he's becoming a part of it. I'm especially interested to hear whether or not the story, characters and dystopian world hook you. Is the world-building interesting or cliche? Same question for the main characters. Nits, of course, are always welcome! Thanks!

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Adventures of a plucky heroine named Kwan. Finalization date moved to 2013-06-30

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The Girl who lost the Earth is the first book in a Science Fiction trilogy where the fate of humanity has been dramatically altered by an interstellar war started by the actions of a young woman. This series questions what it means to be human and what kind of society is best suited for the optimization of humanity. It involves time travel, multi dimensions, dramatic action, and soul searching. I have broke down the novel into smaller chapters in Krudges and the Cybernetic Girl, Book 1 of the Girl Who lost the Earth Trilogy For further discussion of the story, see Matthew Abelack under Writing Feedback Cont.’d in the writing forum. In regard to footnotes, they are for the reviewers convenience and would be a popup in an e-book. In a printed book I would put them in a a glossary.

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A horror story for your enjoyment short and sweet..... Will leave my questions to you readers at the end. Edited: 11/11/12

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Kandahar Afghanistan, walking around in such a desolate location one would never think of the dangers unless you live or work there then it’s a whole different story, Mortar attacks, flooding, high temperatures, freezing temperatures, and random ground attacks. Many different nations have come here and vied for control, now NATO and the US are using it for a base, but something has gone wrong. Russian secrets that have been buried for decades are coming to the surface and Dirk finds himself thrown into a world he never wanted any part in. (This is my first rough draft any input would be greatly appreciated)

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I am currently reworking these chapters to change some of the dynamics of Adin's affliction. The new versions should be posted soon. Feel free to continue reading, or wait for the new version.

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To impress a girl, an ugly young man undertakes a robbery, and inadvertently kills someone. This sets off a chain of events which changes the course of history. This is an early work of mine which has undergone significant rewrites, and I am on the verge of sending it to market. I would like some honest opinions about its readability, characterizations, idea content, and literary merit (if any).

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A combination of soft sci-fi with literary elements, TBotG is a stream of consciousness narrative, written in the form of a suicide letter. It focuses on the people, events and experiences in the life of James Maris. A failed author, his only novel revolves around an alien species disrupting Earth with the troubling message that "your universe is falling apart." James is thrust to the forefront if widespread apocalyptic elements across Earth when, in the real world, actual extraterrestrials send the exact same message to Earth. Fashioned into an unwilling prophet by a ubiquitous televangelist and sensationalized, James, having "predicted" this event, is forced to interpret its meaning for the rest of humanity. What follows is an account of his life through his eyes as he tries to rationalize his improbable, and completely unwanted, position as redeemer (or destroyer) of humanity.

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Time travel, Danger, Eternal Love... Careening between modern times and 11th century Europe, Grace must endure persecution, predators, and a broken heart as she battles along side her fellow Knowers to save the Earth. Sole survivors of an immortal race, the Knowers’ homeland has vanished. Orphaned, using their supernatural powers, they blend with humanity and persevere. Powerful and pure of heart, Knowers feel human emotions deeply, longing for the love that was stolen from them when their precious race was destroyed. Join Grace, Hilde and Aron as they battle against Demon and Evil to preserve humanity. Will the humans they partner with prove as resilient and trustworthy as they appear, or will history repeat itself and betrayal and devastation ensue? Meet the Knowers at: http://theknower.wordpress.com/excerpts/

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Hello, This is actually the second book in a series, I already published the first book Guardians Inc.:The Cypher, (which back in 2008 was called Twilight Inc., the first chapters are in NBW... somewhere...) Anyway,this is the second book. It has a lot of backstory on purpose which is kind of the thing I would like to see how it works with someone who has not read Cypher. (((BTW if anyone wants to get the first one just email me julian.rosado@guardiansinc.com and I'll be more than happy to send you The Cypher in ebook, mobi or PDF.))) SO... The THUNDERSWORD Blurb............. The search for the Book of Concord is on the brink of failure. Thomas can’t move without being followed by the Azure Guard, and the balance between Magic and Technology has begun to shift giving Magical creatures a stronger hold in our world. With new enemies arising and old alliances breaking up, Guardians Incorporated needs an urgent victory or the seven thousand year old plan will fail and a new Dark Age will engulf the world. But just as Thomas begins to discover the inner workings of Guardians Inc. and his place as a Cypher, he also finds out that not everything is as he thought inside the company and that the worst enemy might be the one lurking within. Cheers! Julian

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As the Xenerion's rage across many universes devouring thousands of worlds, it seems nothing can stop them, not even the highly advanced Alterion's. Then a weapon is born on Earth, a backwater planet only good for Time Slaves. The Alterion's think they have found her first; sending a minder to manage this 'Casey Steel.' This young girl from the highlands of Scotland will become the most desirable weapon in all existence. All that Casey wants is a normal childhood but her mothers death drives her to find answers, answers that she may not like. The Avalonians are ancient druids who were driven from Earth to the stars, and now live a peaceful life hidden from the rest of existence. They are asked by their God’s to keep The White Witch safe; they employ an unusual spy to watch over her. While trying to avoid the Xenerion's and the Alterion's, Casey embarks upon a journey to find the answers she so desperately seeks, but first she must find a way to reach the stars.

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The year is 6433. It is 200 years after the unexpected return of Captain Christopher Clousumb and his spaceship the Santa Maria with the knowledge that the universe is finite. This information changed the world. It especially changed the outlooks for Christopher Clousumb, his grandson Johnathan, and Ms. Gram, the hologram that explored the cosmos with the Clousumb family for generations.

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--WARNING!-- Japanese anime and manga based. May at times look abit too fast and not beliveable. I promise I will work on that. Atarashi Sekai {meaning new world in japanese} is about Gotoh and Miyu, a young couple, who are forced out of their universe as it was destroyed by mysterious force that can create and control black-holes. The young lovers now have to constantly move between parallel worlds and find a way to solve their problem or everything in existance will be gone... Are they truly up to the task? ---IMPORTENT!--- This novel will be revised as I write it and get comments.

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'CARAVAN TO HAVEN' Caravan To Haven is based in the post apocalypse world of my previous novel. It tells the story of a thirteen year old girl who undertakes a quest to rescue her mother from a band of men who invaded their camp, killing all the men, boys and babies and taking the women. Her quest becomes much more complicated than that.

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If you are a Star Trek fan, particularly for “The Next Generation” (TNG) series, I think (hope) you will enjoy this novel. You can expect a solid story from the TNG genre that follows the TNG universe; the same familiar cast of characters and bad guys. I did not stray from guidelines set by Paramount. ........................ Synopsis ........................ Captain Picard and crew are assigned the simple mission of escorting two alien diplomats,from a recently discovered planetary system, back to their home planet to ratify a charter with the Federation of Planets to legalizes their entry into the Federation of Planets. As the aliens board the Enterprise, Counselor Troi senses some undefined evil about the two diplomats and warns Captain Picard. However, the diplomats prove to everyone, except Troi, their intentions are good and there is no evil (or is there?). Enter the Romulans, who are also vying for an agreement with the diplomats home planet, because they hold the key to the survival of the Federation of Planets. The Romulans assisted by the Tal Shiar are working toward the subjugation of the Federation and the Alpha Quadrant. Picard must unravel Troi’s mystery as she is driven to near insanity by an undefined evil, and is ultimately faced with saving the Federation of Planets from extinction at the hand of the Romulans. The diplomat's planatary system provides the key to survival, but the battle to save the Federation is grim as Picard becomes embroiled with the aliens over an attack on their religion, the deaths of military a military contingent, and being charged with breaking the Prime Directive. NOTE: Chapter 1 is at the bottom of the chapter list. All feedback is welcome.

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Almanecer is the story of Calvin Dunn, a man who lost everything he had been hard-wired to think he needed in life. Desperate for a new direction, he aligns himself with a scientist who might just have the answer. Calvin agrees to become a test subject for experiments which could benefit all of humanity, but a chain of unlikely mishaps & tragedies leave Calvin unconscious, cryogenically frozen in a capsule - with the entire world around him completely unaware of it. Calvin awakens in the year 2032, in a world more advanced than anything he could have ever imagined. Again finding himself drifting aimlessly in a world that had evolved without him, he discovers an incredible secret that could utterly change mankind forever...

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This is a revision of Randolf. For any and all who read the first draft, I humbly thank you. I have embraced all of the advice given and edited accordingly. You will find that this is an entirely new approach, although the same story. Thank you for your original advice. Please give this one a read and let me know what your thoughts are. Thank you so much!

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Simon could never have guessed that waking up late for college would change his life forever. A globe-trotting adventure combining action, science fiction and just a little humour!

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Alleson is a gorilla of a man, working in a lunar colony bar in the spaceport. After the death of his father he decides to take a vacation earth side. His father left him two intriguing things, an old key from earth, and a book of matches. Surviving long enough to catch a shuttle to Earth, however, is entirely another matter. I am looking for all levels of feedback. I want to get this story ready for submission and sell it. It's been gathering dust long enough.

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Maggie and her niece, Teal, think they already have problems but when Maggie clears out her cellar for Teal to use as a bolt hole from her nagging mother, something far bigger and more terrible happens than either could ever have expected. I would like general feedback please and any will be appreciated! In UK English as usual. Best, Keen

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Dr. Nathan Rysner is a member of the GenRose Bio-engineering team in Chicago. Nathan is exposed to genetically altered material in an accident in the lab and gains the ability to change his own genetic make up at will. A military black ops group is after him and the genetic protocol that can make a warrior impervious in battle. Nathan is on the run for his life. His adventures introduce him to the love of his life, Sherry Turner. Nathan inadvertently releases a healing gene that causes world wide controversy and instantly causes the medical field to become obsolete. The twists at the end will have you returning to the beginning searching for clues. I'm looking for any and all feedback. I only ask that you read from the beginning if you are reviewing for story line. Nits are welcome. I'm particularly interested in your thoughts on dialogue and believability of scenes.

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The Old Souls is a story about the secret world of souls, and a couple of soul mates who take it all to the next level. I am seeking input about smoothing out the first chapter and about what genre to place it in. There are elements of sci-fi, romance, adventure, paranormal, etc. and I'm just not sure where to place it.

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This is the sequel to Static Mayhem. For those of you who read the first book, this story takes place eight years later, and focuses on the children (some adopted, some biological) of some of the characters from it. New readers are welcome, but should be aware that this may not carry as a stand alone story. I guess we'll find out.

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As the cloud hangs over Las Vegas, a thirteen year old boy who loves his guitar and the mountains becomes troubled with the talk of doomsday at school. His friends pressure him not to die a virgin, and finally he makes a decision that leads to an unexpected outcome. NOTE: I have tried to address some of the problems noted by those who left comments. I'd like to know if the same problems remain after the changes.

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A near-future science fiction tale, set in a dystopian Los Angeles. My first attempt at a novel, and I welcome all advice and critiques.

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I didn't intend to enter this contest. I have so little quality writing time that I have to pick and choose my projects. But since I am getting married soon (9 days, 3 1/2 hours from now), I decided to put this story together just for the heck of it. I wrote it pretty quickly and it's my first attempt at a humorous story. I enjoyed writing it and I hope that some of you enjoy it too. Please give any and all feedback. And thanks for reading! (re-submitted 8/30 to clean up some errors and stuff)

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I am looking to see how it flows. Does it capture you, and would you want to read more? In Zeron: The Planet of Death-Sleep, Vindal Vandakoff spins a tale of Zeron, a planet trapped in disaster. Its people suffer daily the evolutionary path of hundreds of millions of years: formation of magma, desert, tsunami, ice age, and death-sleep. Tortured aliens reveal a pending invasion for control of the powerful Etholisk fuel and the pace shifts to mach-speed when The Heiress and her brother, young Nosalj, captain of the elite Defender’s Squadron, join parts of a message that stirs memories in Nosalj of his mother and brother’s murder. As invasion becomes imminent, and rumors spread that the aliens have anti-aging suits designed to protect them from the death-sleep―allowing them to move around Zeron without fear and gain control of the fuel―Nosalj shifts into action. As the first of a suspenseful trilogy, the story spins wildly through romance, betrayal, and revenge, with Nosalj designated as the savior of his people. What part will warrior monks play? And who will be victorious?

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Victorian Conwell, the owner of one of the most successful and unusual businesses on the west coast has her hands, and the hands of everyone she knows, full. A gifted teleporter with a complicated past she finds herself in the middle of a conspiracy that will take her and the members of her corporation all over the globe and into the pits of hell. Follow Victorian as old loves clash with current obligations sending her life into a tailspin the world will never forget.

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This story takes one of history's great mysteries--the disappearance of the Roanoke Colony in the 1500's--and puts a sci-fi spin on it, involving aliens and a government conspiracy. This is a rough first draft--any and all comments/suggestions welcome!

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Having just been killed in a mysterious shuttle explosion, Gethin Bryce is back to figure out why. Bryce is an unusually gifted investigator with the Global Republic; due to his proximity to the shuttle tragedy, he finds himself assigned to the case. Bryce's investigation takes him from the luxurious enclaves of Earth’s elite to the battered Wastelands beyond civilization’s protective thrall. Linking up with a planet-spanning corporate powerhouse, he also befriends a grim outlander named Celeste Segarra. She has an important piece of the puzzle – proof of a sadistic entity from Earth's unremembered past which threatens not just civilization, but all life... Everywhere.

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The Ayim Gorath, a powerful race of women, must find a genematch for their princess and create an heir. They set their sights on Rayler Hubb, a wayfaring rock star on his way past their planet. While captured and forced to join their Orgasmium -- or man harem -- Rayler can only communicate with women. Since the only nearby, non-hostile carrier of the X chromosome is Jennique, his on-again, off-again secret soul mate who won't speak to him, Rayler will have to use a combination of wits, musicianship, and sex appeal to free himself before the princess is impregnated and he's chopped up and fed to the Royal Court. ***This is something new I'm working on. I'm not sure whether it's a short story or a novelette. It's a soft sci-fi/romance/action-adventure story.***

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Hello, I am working on a space-opera novel, and the Delthane pilots are some of the characters that will appear prominently in it. I consider this short story as a test run for the tone and style of the novel. I welcome all feedback. Specially grammar. And I have a very thick skin. I prefer to be told: "Veer away from things like these" if you are of that opinion. Saludos! Julian

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I'd like any constructive edits, particularly ones that will help me pinpoint weaknesses and improve my writing. Also, I need feedback on the title. I love and hate it. What do you think?

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Within the last bastions of democratic society called bluezones, beyond the chaotic slums and destitute refugee camps, exists a technology that could either push civilization further into the abyss, or bring forth its salvation. - Struggling to save his innovative hybrid techno-finance company from malign threats leftover from twenty two years of severe economic depression a young uberman ends up fighting for his life against ruthless enemies. - Corporate banksters are increasingly adopting unscrupulous strategies and tactics. - Dangerous slumlords have infiltrated every facet of the economy and run their gangs like small quasi-nations. - Rebellious artificial intelligent entities, which may or may not believe the human world actually exists, are going rogue. - And the bluezone government, so obsessed in asserting its authority, is willing to risk all out civil war. - Not that James Tucker, a war veteran and corporate uberman by the age of nineteen, and a staunch proponent of alternative economic theorem, minds putting his life on the line. At stake is the destruction of his country, the disillusionment of his fans, and the prospect of betraying a promise he made to his daughter. - THE BLUEZONE WILL NEVER BE THE SAME AGAIN - - This near future tale addresses the key elements of what constitute real power in society, loyalty and honour as opposed to money and violence. ************* I am looking for feedback on individual chapters, especially ones that haven't received any reviews. On things like grammar, structure, character and dialogue, as well as an indication of where the chapter stands on the boring barometer. (Revised Title; 07/01/13)

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Data dealer Black Lucas is given an offer he can't refuse. Recover the lost data herds of Korean crime warlord, Kim Sung, or wind up dead in seven days. He is joined by data jackal Mambo Ahmed in a desperate race against time in their search for legendary console cowboy Hot Zephyr. Along the way they must confront the mysterious Stemper Tashfin.

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What makes a human, human? Are heroes born, bred, or created?

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In this era where science fiction is becoming science fact, technology is mixing with strongly held myths, and art is blending the chaos to shine a light on the rapid changes, we will either destroy ourselves or else learn to live in peace, without and within. This is the story of a particularly gifted young psychic, Aurora Swift, and the psychiatrist who tries to unravel her worlds, and in doing so unintentionally comes into contact with interconnected universal mysteries, dimensions, ancient beings and civilizations. Mixture of fantasy and reality genres. Mainly, the two settings are the modern day present with a bit of government conspiracy, and a sort of underworld that Aurora calls the Night World she escapes into to keep her sanity intact what with the pressures of her life. We meet a lot of other psychics in Aurora's circle and travel all over the U.S. and the world in search of some type of salvation. ** The first six or so chapters are non-linear and deliberately jarring as Aurora is experiencing a crossover of dimensions and times that will be sorted out in later chapters.// If I were to summarize the emotional stew or message of the story, it might go something like this: It is easy to wonder if our lives are worthless and actions are pointless because all will be forgotten one day. If every inventor, thinker, artist, intuitive being, and scientist followed through with this line of thinking, we’d still be in the Dark Ages or perhaps cause a new one. In this time of flourishing light, we need not allow the darkness of short-sightedness envelop us. The power is within us to make this world whatever we want it to be and become. And yes, one can make a difference with a little help from her friends.// **NOTE: I am on this site for constructive criticism. If you believe my work is only worthy of a 1 or 2 and feel like writing a snide scathing review or telling me how to write according to you, go somewhere else. My work isn't perfect, but I what I don't need is people who wish to feel superior by cutting me down or taking out their bad day on me. If you "don't get it" either ask me why something is written as it is or read something else. That I've had to explain this is sad, but there are plenty of A-holes in the world and that is reflected by similar percentages on this site. For those of you here to learn and grow and offer positive suggestions: Welcome. ---- (4/23/09 Currently reposted Chapter 1-3 and more coming soon for fans old and new).

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This is a repackaging of the material I had already published to incorporate feedback and to allow me to get more detailed feedback on the parts. New material is included in the later chapters. This is a story about relationships, intrigue, and the interstellar trade in chocolate.

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