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This is a story of the innocence and betrayal of a girl who lives "on the other side of the tracks". She finds acceptance and affirmation that she is not just a girl from the wrong side of town, with a man she meets online. I rewrote the ending after a TWO PAGE critique from an editor! Yippee! Please see part II

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A short story detailing an unusual event experienced by my step-mother. NOTE: This is not meant to be scary, but instead a poignant view of Fran and her relationship with the other characters in the story. Feedback on characterization, plot, flow, nits, etc. are greatly appreciated.

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same as part 1. This is the conclusion of a 6,500 word story.

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A man whose life is in decline gets a chance to make a difference. How do you respond to Bill. Does the story keep you interested and, of course, do you enjoy it? Candid comments please. Thanks.

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In the First Age a gifted race, the Felwarn, were created to guard mankind from the evil god of that world. Over the ages the Felwarn withdrew from humanity and eventually became distant legends from an ancient world.

Now, in the Fifth Age, a new generation of Felwarn are leaving their safe homeland to take the traditional road of initiation. Felwarn law decrees they must keep their identity and powers hidden from humans.
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Please Note: /1. Word Count; It is a concern but I've discovered it's not a matter of trimming words, but of streamlining the story. I will look at the big picture after completion. But you are welcome to flag scenes you think might not be necessary. /2. Big revisions/rewrites take me time, and will likely take place after this draft stage. Minor tweaks/grammar checks occur along the way.
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This story was in the Finals of the Strongest Start Four (2010) Fantasy genre. I also recip on reviews. Thank you!

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A story of two marriages and two deaths. Is it clear? do you think readers will have trouble following it? The structure is a little tricky. Be frank, please.

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Version #2--Only the last segment is altered. I tried for a subtler ending. Works? For those who've read the original, this better or worse?

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A confrontation between a single mother and a case worker. A first person present tense narrative. How does the narrative work? What is your reaction to the two primary characters? Frank comments, please.

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A man gets lost while driving home at night through a snow storm and is confronted with a challenging situation. General feedback desired: did story hold your interest, was it thought-provoking, would you want to read more by this writer.

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A nine-year-old boy befriends his ailing great-aunt and fears losing her. Many thanks to all who have given valuable feedback so far; much appreciated!

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Blood Moon is the purported memoir of Pontius Pilate's spymaster, bagman and political fixer, the outrageous and flamboyant Artemidorus Scipio. He narrates his version of events during the Gospel period in the Roman province of Judaea including his deadly encounter with Jesus and other events he regards as far more important - such building an Aqueduct and seducing a certain Jewish Princess.

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