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This is an addition to Lee's anthology "A Visitor to Sandahl". Still very rough, please point out places I can tighten up or describe more. It's a very mellow story, no earth-shattering disasters, or terrible cruelties, just a small decision that changes one man's life. Ann and Karen, hope you don't mind my liberties with your stories. Tell me if I got the details wrong.

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Being workshopped as a draft. THIS IS PART 2. PLEASE ONLY READ IF YOU'VE READ PART ONE. THIS story is about LOVE and desire. About moral relativity. i added to the sex scenes today. i hope they come across as i want them to -- sensual, not 'erotic'

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Young women are recruited to kidnap twelve year old girls from public places, noone ever hears from them again until one of the girls escapes. To help her deal with her ordeal,she is taken to a psychologist who is a member of the DAR, an ancient society charged with protecting the earth.

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This is not a traditional fantasy story. There's no magic or uncanny powers, just extraordinary feats required of ordinary people. Set in a world of swords and castles, unwitting humanity teeters on the brink of annihilation at the hands of a mysterious and ancient race of giants known as the Vawgrim. A group of young war survivors must overcome their devastating personal losses along with their own trepidation to join a hardened disfigured mercenary in an epic attempt to thwart a vengeful crusade centuries in the planning.

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The great city of Anderholm prospered at the crossroads of kingdoms, its gates open and its people blissfully unaware of their impending doom. Two men are poised to change its fate. One wants to watch and record while the other schemes to bring back the Age of Magic and Demons. Into the middle of it all there is Shadyia, beautiful and passionate. An insatiable seductress, a pawn in an ancient game she barely understands. A woman with needs. A whore with pride.

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In the First Age a gifted race, the Felwarn, were created to guard mankind from the evil god of that world. Over the ages the Felwarn withdrew from humanity and eventually became distant legends from an ancient world.

Now, in the Fifth Age, a new generation of Felwarn are leaving their safe homeland to take the traditional road of initiation. Felwarn law decrees they must keep their identity and powers hidden from humans.
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Please Note: I love all my reviews and I take them seriously. As you go you might notice my *Flaws*; too many unnecessary words/adjectives/adverbs. You can point that out if you like. :) But I am working on that. I welcome all types of feedback, and wherever. And I look forward to reviewing your work in return.
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NOTE: Chapter numbers have changed. Chapter 1 is now the prologue, and so forth. The prologue is now a stand alone chapter/story. If you have comments about this please share them. Because I'm still not sure it is the right thing to do. Thank you for reading

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This is the sequel to Static Mayhem. It's been on the back burner for some time now, but I recently unearthed the few sketches I have for it, and I think it may be time to start fleshing it out. So far, I'm just calling it Static Mayhem 2, although my notes have the working title Mayhospheres. Since the original title for Static Mayhem was "Big Yellow Taxi", I don't have the best faith in my ability to name things, so I'm going to leave this approximately untitled for the time being.

For those of you who read the first book, this story takes place eight years later, and focuses on the children (some adopted, some biological) of some of the characters from it. New readers are welcome, but should be aware that this may not carry as a stand alone story. I guess we'll find out.

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This story is set in the world of Eden, inside the universe of Requiem (which is the brainchild and creation of a friend of mine). The Venerated Republic is in a state of collapse following the expansion of a terrible sickness known as the Torment and the evil machinations of a daemon-worshiping cult the Resolve. Gill is a small fish in a small pond who gets mixed up with the wrong crew and after a brush with death gets swept into a pond far too large for a fish that small. I'd like feedback in the form of grammar fixes, continuity, ideas on how to expand the story, and so on. I forced this story out to get myself moving forward and so this is a brand new idea in its infant stages. I hope you enjoy!

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I would appreciate any feedback on this draft. Don't be shy, I have a VERY thick skin.

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Snap…crackle…pop. The sounds of bones breaking and shifting and of muscles tearing haunt Alex Reed as she discovers a terrifying secret about her family. Because of that secret she and her brother are now being hunted. With the help of her new friends who hold dark secrets themselves, can she survive?

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A Road of Blood and Slaughter

Follow Artemo, the Killer of Men and Horsa, the Man of Honour as they carve their path through a post-Atlantean world of swords and sorcery.

Also featuring: Zolyana, the Harlot of Sippar; Sargon, a most lethal doctor; Nestor, a sorcerous goldsmith; Sighere the song-singer; Melas, renegade and traitor; and a host of other formidable and memorable characters.

The stories so far:

1 - Blood Oath. Dark doings and double-cross in Sippar, City of Sin. 2036 KC (Kritian Calendar date).

2 - Free Companions. A younger Artemo tangles with a company of brutal mercenaries. 2026 KC.

3 - Killers of Men. Horsa, Artemo, and their part in the fall of Khepri of the Gleaming Spires to the sinister Vesh. Picks up from the events of Blood Oath. 2036 KC.

4 - The Ice Witch. A younger Horsa encounters an ancient horror beneath the icy lands of the far north. 2030 KC.

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5 - Desert. Artemo and Melas guard a caravan heading south from Palmyrene. Follows on from the events in Killers of Men. 2036 KC.

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6 - The Daughters of Agasaya. Horsa and Lorengri adventure in the jungles of the far south. Takes place after the events described in Killers of Men. 2037 KC.

7 - Blood River. The younger Horsa and Artemo venture into the Hyperborean wastes. Set a few years after The Ice Witch. 2033 KC.

8 - The Nameless City. Artemo and Horsa discover one of the lost cities of the old Atlantean Empire. Set after The Daughters of Agasaya. 2038 KC.

9 - Macae. Artemo's part in the famous siege. Chronologically the first tale. 2022 KC.

10 - City of Sin. Artemo and Horsa go to work for Nestor in Sippar. Takes place immediately before the events described in Blood Oath. 2035 KC.

11 - Atlantis Risen. The Vesh make a new bid for empire. Takes place after the events described in The Nameless City. 2039 KC.

12 - A Hero's Death. The final tale. 2040 KC.

What the fans said:

'wonderful, twisted characters' - Rita Aguilar

'entertainingly ruthless' - Knighthawk

'vivid and disturbing' - Romi Moondi

'magnificent sensory adventures' - Ann Walters

'unredeeming and unrelenting depravity' - Alan Miles

'action, intrigue and lust, what more could a person want?' - C Lee Brown

'I'm surprised Zolyana didn't get raped' - Lou Lou S

'I am now feeling extremely queasy' - Payge Turner

'worthy of the most decadent robber barons' - Sumthinirote

'vivid, brutal' - L.L. Grace

'fraught with danger and conflict' - Crazee Sharon

'scares the crap out of me!' - Flowing Pencil

'compelling' - Unbar

'you sure know how to pen blood and guts' - Susan Stec

'honest brutality' - Rach Elle

'oh good God! Not the pole again!' - Modobenny

'horrifying ... I feel like passing out' - Sara Basrai

'I love it.' - Heidi Presswood

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Ayareli (A.K.A. Sabrielle, then Taryn) and Sabarain move with their parents from Merienneth to High Meadow. They become adults in a world of winged horses and conspiracy where they must learn what fires their passion and what tempers it. Their parents, Jol and Carren, must balance dreams and family. I'm looking for feedback on the theme of balancing the duties and pleasures of your life. All four of my main characters need to learn how to do that or risk losing their family. Are you getting that? Is it too subtle? too obvious?

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The Cloud has been hovering over Las Vegas for weeks. People are frightened, praying and repenting of their sins. Deep in the bowels of the earth, a mini-city is buzzing with industry ... A Fantasy.

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This novel involves three lives caught up in the miserable web of slavery. Desperation and vengeance drive the three main characters: Assad, a moor and military man is betrayed by an empire that is being torn apart; Alain Gravois, the son of a fisherman, living in Nantes, France, struggles to become his own man; and Osawe, a warrior, living in a small village situated between two warring kingdoms along the 'slave coast' of Africa, struggles to survive. France, the 'slave coast' of Africa, Morocco and Haiti are the backdrop to their story which spans twenty-three years, 1727 to 1750. All criticism is welcome, and thanks to all who have helped.

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Synopsis: Phillip is a college student living in New Orleans who teaches karate and does magic shows to make ends meet. After two mysterious strangers sweep Phillip into a strange world where magic is real "for his own safety" Phillip is forced to use all of his fighting and sleight of hand skills just to stay alive. Will Phillip survive long enough to discover all of the secrets of his own cloudy past and why powerful forces seek his destruction? Feedback desired: This is my first attempt at a fantasy novel so I would appreciate thorough criticism and advice by those more experienced.

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Foiled again! Why does God keep on testing me, doesn't he know my track record already.

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A 100 word drabble converted into a 100 word poem. A fairy tale attempting to answer, "Where did the time go?"

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At exotic shorelines and mysterious lands around the world, Beachways magazine photographer Lee Merrick is entranced by mystical visions of a mysterious woman in white and strives to find out why, and if these apparitions are manifestations leading to the prophecy in his youth that he would someday meet "Her" along the beach. But will he survive physical threats from the outer reaches of such far-away lands, and the inner demons of his self-doubt to avoid succumbing to the threat to his own sanity and wasting his life on a romantic mirage?

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The story is speculative fiction, part 1 of a tale of an alternative cause and effect system, one that operates in the background of the story and is often thought of as Magic. Black or White, who can say? The answer is in the eye of the gentle reader. So is Justice, by the way, including the lengths some may go to achieve it. Magic anyone?

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Alexander is an orphan who's only desire is to find a family that will take him in and love him. He can't seem to get adopted though - no matter what he does. While he feels that no one wants him, he quickly learns that there is more to his mysterious past than he was lead to believe. Follow Alexander as he discovers his roots, learns of magic, and finds the other world from which he came. Oh, and everyone wants him, he just doesn't know it yet.

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The beginning is a prelude to Nino's unwanted departure back home. A spate of Confirmed unprovoked shark attacks is taking Californian beaches by storm. In a span of just two weeks, sixty four people died, hundreds left in dire need of stitches. The cause? A group of Africans can think of no better way to bring him home to attend his coronation rites.

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Eolyn is the story of love and magic tested by dogma, war and shifting loyalties. Set in the Kingdom of Moisehen, it forces two friends into opposite sides of a violent conflict, the outcome of which will determine the fate of a millennial tradition of sorcery. Any feedback is welcome. Feel free to pick up the story at a middle or late chapter if you prefer, but please keep in mind that many plot elements will have been set up prior to the chapter you read. Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I hope you enjoy!

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Naruto is my favourite Manga (and Anime) I thought I'd post this in case anyone does read it. It's an amazing story. This particular poem is about the Demon Fox which was sealed into Naruto when he was a baby. In parts it's Naruto speaking to the Demon inside him - and about the isolation and rage that comes from the Demon. Most likely no one will understand this - ohwell! I enjoy writing fanfic poetry, so I was compelled to post. Ask anything if you like. :D

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Dear Gentle Reader, there is, indeed, more to life than meets the eye of the casual observer. I wrote The Last Call when the time of All Souls Day, Halloween to most believers, was upon us; a time when a tale of other worldly dread seemed appropriate. Horror can be more than a bacchanal of blood and gore, the aftermath of blade and chainsaw, fang and claw. Horror can also simmer, sight unseen, unknown to the world at large - except for the unfortunate few.

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Emme is like any other teenage girl—well, except for her annoying habit of surging anything electrical. Her eyes don’t glow, she can’t disappear, and she certainly doesn’t know how to trap someone in midair. Leave that to Tobi, the new boy in her science class. But Tobi’s unexpected appearance and bizarre talents mark him as a Watcher; a group sent to find and destroy anyone with a unique energy signature like Emme’s. There’s just one problem…dangerous as the Watchers might be, an inexplicable force has bonded the two of them together. Now, a separation would kill them both.

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Life hasn't been kind to Janie. She's always wanted to just disappear, and up until now she's managed quite successfully. When Marcus, a popular boy in town shows an interest in her reality shifts and her past comes back intent on killing her.

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A philandering Cavalier meets with adventure as he journeys through an enchanted land.

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What does a 14 yr old girl know about an historic battle that took place about 700 years ago, to the point that she contradcts her history teacher at every turn and to the mirth of her clasmates? Was she there as she claims or not? Constructive criticism is welcome. Thank you.

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Dark forces threaten an imaginary world of Knights & Honor. More than bravery and valor will be required to save the world from evil. The men and women of the 9 Knights must find a way to halt the unstoppable, defeat the impervious.

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In the far, far, future, in a parallel universe, the Earth, one of three capitals in the United Federation of Gallixcs is under the military protection of the 1st MilkeyWay forces. This is the adventures of the forces and their protection of the UFG’s western border. -"Galictic Border Wars"- In this first book (Zokk Incident), Fleet Admiral Kinley, Commander, 1st MilkeyWay Forces, is faced with over whelming challenges. The 1st MWF lost the opening battle in the border war with Zokk prime and the Canis Gallixc Peoples Union of Planets. The Federation western border stands at the brink of total collapse. First, he needs his staff to find out why his forces lost. A major problem to that is his number-one Fleet analysis, William Vates, is in a hospital bed nearly dead after having his flagship blown-out from under him. Kinley has to gather a team, led by Doc Pine, to save Vates’s life. All on the medical team see no hope except Doc Pine and William’s brother Carl and they both insist that the life saving procedures continue. After six weeks, William comes out of his coma and then goes through the pains of the healing process. He slowly gains his memory and is chosen to lead the debriefing investigation. In addition to that, Kinley needs to find ships and personnel to staff a new MilkeyWay Core that he just lost in the last battle. These forces are needed to hold back any counter attack the Zokk might throw at their border. And if that isn’t enough, he has the President of the MilkeyWay Gallixc, showing up early to promote him and take him back to Earth. In with that, the President wants Kinley to indorse an addendum to the constitution giving the president dictatorial powers. In the mean time, what the MilkeyWay forces don’t know is that the Zokks are in an internal conflict, with the Opposition leader having a disk showing the High leader and his family committing horrific acts of cannibalism. It was Ron Pits, a federation spy, who because of a mishap, was left on Zokk prime that this information came to light. With luck, Pits, has the brother of the high military leader of Zokk working for him and has found out that the 1st MWF senior staff has two Zokk spies in their group.

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Written as a ballad for main character in the Cable Hornman series about a traveling bard.

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*************PLEASE TAKE NOTE, THIS HAS BEEN ABANDONED FOR THE RE-WRITE******************* (I have performed a major rewrite and changed the title.) This novel involves three lives caught up in the miserable web of slavery. Desperation and vengeance drive the three main characters: Alain Gravois, the son of a fisherman living in Nantes, France, struggles to become his own man; Osawe, a warrior, living in a small village situated between two warring kingdoms along the 'slave coast' of Africa, struggles to survive; and Assad, a moor, and military man, is betrayed by an empire that is being torn apart. France, the 'slave coast' of Africa, Morocco and Haiti are the backdrop to their story which spans twenty-three years, 1727 to 1750. All criticism is welcome.

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The Premise of ‘The Gold Mine.’ Jacob Townsend inherits a a gold mine in the Sierra Nevadas, from his Great-Great-Great-Grandparents, Tom Watson and Eliza Townsend. In the box containing the hundred and fifty year old legal documents is a map made by Eliza to the location of the mine and a diary written by Eliza. The innovations she designed and had built would amaze engineers of today. Scheming relatives would like to take a peek at that map. Living in present day Dallas, Texas, Jacob takes a business trip to Caracas, Venezuela with his friend, Jessica Lopez. While there, a copy of the map is stolen from their hotel room and a flight in a small plane to a local gold mine is sabotaged, forcing the pilot to land on a river in the jungles of Venezuela. The pilot and the two of them trek through the forest and raft down the river trying to get back to civilization. They encounter a Drug Gang, who hold them hostage. What Jacob does to escape will stay as a nightmare with him as long as he lives. Back in the US, more relatives make attempts to steal the map. An attack on Jacob leads him to a Drug Lord, Manos Santos in Brazil who has connections in the US. Jacob seeks help from the CIA who turn him down, but not before meeting an agent named Marilyn who falls for him. Now he has two women on his hands. He goes to Rio de Janeiro at the height of the Mardi Gras Festival to track down Santos and confront him. At the shoot-out in Santos mansion, Jacob is wounded. Marilyn makes a surprising appearance and helps him escape. Jessica is furious but thankful. The diary leads Jessica to believe that Eliza and Tom may have perished in the mine. With a GPS system Jacob and Jessica trace their way to the mine. Using modern safety suits they penetrate the interior of the mine to find a few surprises. One of them being the body of someone they know, overcome by poisonous gases. Now they know who had the map stolen. Another chapter in the diary leads them to an amazing find.

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Sequel to The Evolution of Janie. I always appreciate feedback of all types, however this is a sequel and it is written with the assumption that the reader has read The Evolution of Janie and is familiar with the characters and what has happened in the previous book, so when reviewing for content, character development and background story please take that into consideration. :)

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An unknown entity begins writing letters to the editor. R-Restricted

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Ophelia and Kempis, orphaned in youth, grow up in the Monastery of the Brotherhood in the beautiful city of Ringell. However, the cold spiritual war is heating up and Abba, their God has called them to service. Fighting a growing affection, Ophelia and Kempis must keep their mission in mind while avoiding Ophedius, The Dark Lord and his 2nd in command, Kidron, as well as the horde of minions that serve them. Little does anyone know how far and afield this adventure will take them, dark and light alike.

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Follow along with young Cable Hornman as he ventures forth into the mystical Lands of Methanasia. He leaves the home of his foster parents in the northern provinces of the Dane-Klyve and travels south to the old city of Smeln, the once magnificent capital of the declining Western Empire. In hopes of perfecting his swordsmanship and fighting skills, Cable joins up with the Fighting Ninth of the city guards. Little does he know that another traveler has also entered the city for evil purposes. This selection is no longer available for review except for the epilogue.

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Any feedback, good and bad is appreciated. That said.... It started with a honey bear and a pizza

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Necromancer, sequel to the Blood Inheritance, takes us to the darker side of the magical world Alexandria Reed has found herself emmersed in. Her friend's emerging powers as a necromancer has put them all in danger. An old enemy from the Cameron's past has come to exact her revenge. It will take all thier combined skills to stop the ancient evil, but will be enough to save them all?

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16 year old Tommy Travers was sure no harm had ever come to a person from simply reading a book. He couldn't have been more wrong. Tommy isn't a genius. He can't cast a spell. But Tommy's gift is the envy of every book lover in the world. He can enter the World of Books. But what are the rules? What are the consequences for not following those rules? How do you get in and most importantly, how do you get out?

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Valentine is a Child of Loki, one of the original Berserker tribesmen of Norse Folklore. With unobstructed access to the minds of his chosen victims and the ability to assume their precise physical characteristics, Valentine takes what he wants, when and from where he pleases. He lives his life as the ultimate identity thief, unconstrained by the password-encrypted barriers his human counterparts face. For seventy years, Valentine shunned the decadent, egoistic ways of his compatriots, but the discovery of a fiend operating under his very nose, will test his love for the human race.

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Warning: This contains Purple! who am I kidding? its a velvet indigo cushion with tassels and gold trim. :D My first title choice was 'What's in a Name?' but it was taken. This place/event/characters are from my fantasy world. Although it does not take place in the current time frame of my novel. I hope you enjoy it.

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All feed back is welcome. This story is violent and sexual -it contains content for a mature audience only.

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Ally's biggest problem wasn't that she couldn't get to the altar for her wedding--It was working her way through the land of M before anyone notices she's gone.

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In a modern era where magic is as real as technology, black magic is a more potent threat to civilization than terrorism or rogue nations. I'm interested in receiving advice on word choice, phrasing, story flow, plot decisions, and anything else the reader can think of that will improve the story.

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This is rhiannon on Rhiannon expanded; as suggested. It has an ending, is either more truthful or it is not. Remember when I tell you anything about this story that "I am Lying Now."

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Okay, so i gave up trying to describe a sex scene, lol. May add it in before the contest judging, but here is the story. See what you think! All feedback appreciated, thanks!

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This is meant to be a children's story with illustrations--I'm not sure whether this is the right place to post it, but I'd still be interested in any feedback I get. I'm not thrilled with the writing--I think it falls flat. Maybe I should scrap and start over. . .

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A Re-boot of the Rhiannon series. It rewrites the first Rhiannon story (published elsewhere)The Gorgon. It is deliberately inconsistent with other stories published or workshopped. Rhiannon is more complicated, Rosalyn has a different status, it is in 3rd person. It has themes of transformation,the loss and reclamation of important things (although they are not what the characters or readers think at first). A word on its setting: this is not set in medieval Europe. It takes place on a world that is about 11th century in terms of its social and technological development, but is 30 lightyears away from Earth, which is occupied by a world (Terra) with 21st century development. It takes place in our future, but in that world's (worlds') past. One culture is corrupted by Terran society, others are not. Oddities like the characters using slang from the US c. 2009 is thus explained. It is the tale of the fall and rise of Rhiannon, the ever so great descendent of the lengendary woman/goddess of the same name. All feedback is appreciated. Thank you.

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An interesting day in the curio shop.

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This book explores the curiosity and fearless determination of youth. It takes place long ago and revolves around Kate Powers, a nineteen year old who reluctantly accepts an enchanted package filled with 'tools' to start her on the journey of a lifetime. Her pursuit opens the door to magic, mystery, and a family history she could never have imagined. I am looking forward to and will appreciate any and all feedback.

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Celtic lore states that the ancients believed the swan a symbol of death and the peacock a symbol of immortality. A peek at what might have occured between the two....

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In this one, Nino, a University educated guy returns home to meet his magical grandfather, and the old man taught him something missed out in the world of horror/fantasy. When Nino failed to agree, the old man decided to show him a practical example, which requires them to travel through the ocean for seven days with no breathing tube or underwater goggles. I will love to hear feedback from you. Any feedback. Feel free to give a negative criticism if you wish. Thank you very much in advance.

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Imagine yourself young, independent, successful; then suddenly swept through time into a future where nothing resembles the past except the granite mountains. You’re plus some unusual senses and appendages and you’ve got nothing of your previous life but a few precious memories, some ill preserved fruits and meager survival gear. And, you’re pregnant. It can’t be anything but a bad dream—a nightmare you’ll wake up from. But you don’t. Ridiculous? Impossible? Well, that is exactly what happens to Katherine Paine in my new novel, Monarch UV3000, when a "mistake" in a genetic research lab inoculates her with a UV serum derived from the cell material of a Monarch butterfly. Like other subjects, Katherine is encased in a chrysalis and emerges in a high cave above the San Joaquin valley, time unmarked accept that the valley is a vast inland sea. Preceded by the others, Katherine arrives among the Dannais, a closely knit tribe of future citizens, to find that she has been identified as the heroine of the society's most pervasive myth. I hope you will enjoy Monarch. I'm looking for feedback on the structure and storyline of this work.

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Natsach's true identity has been a secret to everyone at her mother's request, inlcuding her brother Taman. With the power to see the future through the intents of people that she comes in contact with, Natsach has knowledge that that many people would take advantage of. As it is, Taman has plans of his own to advance himself through the marriage of Natsach to the patriarch. Once the opportunity finally presents itself, Natsach escapes the shebat to find her destiny as a Dreamer.*******I am looking for feedback about what reads with confusion, any questions that come up while reading, and gramatical editing that I have overlooked.

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The second installment in the Of Kings And Gods Trilogy by Christopher S. Ledbetter, Caenus and The Return to Ares' Altar continues the saga of Caenus, Prince of Iolkos, Greece. Caenus returns home from a horrific trial in Neapolis where he nearly perished. He sets his eyes on a new adventure, one of marriage. It seems that his fate and destiny keep getting in the way of his plans. At its core, the Of Kings And Gods Trilogy frames the philosophical question of whether or not our fates and destinies are of our choosing, or are they thrust upon us.

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I loved writing this story, based on a real life tale. He's one of my best mates and from time to time we have to unleash our fantasies. Rewritten story.

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She finds herself responding to the feeling of being observed by something in gold lame. Just what it is, well that's up to the reader. I'm looking for laughs and a little tingle. I recently moved this from Erotic to Adult subject, commercial fiction on suggestion of several readers. So if you already read it in Erotica, this is the same story. Desole.

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A nine-year-old boy befriends his ailing great-aunt and fears losing her. Many thanks to all who have given valuable feedback so far; much appreciated!

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Alderyle is being slowly invaded by an enemy they thought was dead. The evil is spreading even into the sacred, isolated lands of the Whitshire people, the Children of the Ancients, a nearly immortal race of craftsmen, farmers and tradesmen. "Dove" Athelhard is Whitshire's pride and joy, a young silversmith respected and loved by all. Suddenly accused of a crime he didn't commit, he's cast out into a harsh world he'd only heard about in travellers' tales to right a wrong that never existed. Helped by a small band of friends, he endures unimagined hardships and danger and discovers a destiny forged in prophecy.***Feedback: Smooth read? Plot holes? Continuity errors? Strong or weak sections? Typos? Serious grammar will be handled later by an outside editor.

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John forces himself to go to yet another boring ball as escort to his widowed aunt...never imagining that it would lead to the adventure of his life!

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Amongst the humans live people with talents; people like the Knowledgeables. A small percentage of the population are Special People, and only a small percentage of them ever become aware of their gifts. In a world where races such as Hunter-Seekers, Wingsmen, Curets, Tick-Tocks, and DeathWatchers mingle with the human population, only the uncooperative and stubborn Knowledgeables truly know how these gifts can be used to rule the world. A combination dark fantasy, thriller and present-day character/relationship-driven story.

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This is really a compilation of poetry that revolves around a few main "characters" - Unholy, Dream Spirits, Dream Child, and Angel. I have been writing this poetry series for many years now, and decided to put them all into one anthology by themselves.

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On the world of Guya… In an age of darkness… A time when the Inquisition raged and the Church of the All Father sent Inquisitors and Witch Hunters into the lands to burn witches. One such witch was named Sundra. Sentenced to death by fire, she escapes her fate with the aid of a mysterious swordsman named Jorn. Together they must forge a bond as Sundra takes the oath to be the next Oathbearer and wield the powerful Sword of Balance to destroy the church and save the world from an ancient and unholy evil.

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Ruled by Darkness the world is a dangerous place to live. A human woman finds herself transported from earth and ends up in this world. How did she get there? How will she be able to leave? But more importantly, why was she brought there?

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Jerry is an alcoholic, petty thief, coward and a failure. He mistakenly dies. Because fate and the most powerful forces in the universe need him, they decide to reincarnated him but before he returns he needs to commit to either good or evil. Feedback Desired:I've been playing around with writing for a couple of years,never taken a course,never had any feedback and this is really my first posting of any of my works in the public eye. I want to learn, get better and develop. So any feedback you can give me would be appreciated.

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Part one.

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When Glory Rattinuss falls in love with Cosmos Sharpteeth,she doesn't realise the opposition to their marriage will involve a long, perilous journey to the Shining Mountains. This is a children's fantasy fiction novella.

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Any criticism or positive feedback is welcome.

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This is the first chapter of a novel I have been working on. I am looking for feedback on the structure on the first chapter as well as its readability. Is it interesting, does it captivate? Does it make you want to read more. But please, any feedback is welcome. There will be six chapters introducing and linking new characters, who will then set off to adventure together in chapter seven. This is the reason for the rapid backgroung.

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With time growing short, and still so much to do, Mai and her friends have to work extra hard. After being lied to and betrayed by her so-called-friend, Sam, Mai and her new friends are on a race against time to find the other Chosen Ones. They are the protectors of the planet Solaria, who fled to Earth, seeking refuge when another planet—Romokka—attacked their home planet. The people of Solaria live secretly among the people of Earth, and Mai and her friends have to find ten of them. No one had ever dared to stand up to Romokka before. All who had tried before had fallen. Mai and her friends are determined to defend Earth and fight back. But with the Fire Tribe on Romokka’s side, they have many enemies. General Karan, Fudo, Soren, and Sam are just a few of them. But they have even more allies. They only chance they have of stopping Romokka is to locate all the Chosen Ones. But to find them, they must travel to the Solarian Islands—which is were most of the Solarians evacuated to. With things getting so hectic, Mai can never be sure what to expect from this new world she has just discovered.

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Another short story I wrote in one sitting. It occurred to me that all of my stories were about dragons, or so it seemed at the time, so I decided my next one would have a unicorn. And this sarcastic guy came out.

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It's All Mercenary is a humorous take on the overly used plot of a quest. You have your generic characters: Mage, Barbarian, Healer, Mercenary, etc, but they are filled by personalities who don't quite fit the boundaries of their roles. Told in first person. I have thick skin, so don't be afraid to tell it like you see it.

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What would happen if a modern monster met an ancient one? Any feedback is welcome.

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Three months before her sixteenth birthday, Ellia Jacobson's quiet life is coming to an end. When Ellia’s parents become scarce and her favorite neighbor moves away, she adjusts to the losses but feels more adrift than ever. Unaware that her new neighbors have orchestrated the isolation, she turns to them for companionship. The secretive Braeburn family seems too perfect and alluring to be human. Despite the alarms that go off in her head she feels more drawn to them with each passing day. Especially, the older brother Tony, who has an unsettling effect on her mood. However, when Ellia learns that Braeburn’s have a plan for her, she doesn't go quietly. To complicate matters, even though Nicholas has a claim on her, Tony finds that he wants her for himself.

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How dangerous could an assistant librarian job be? Thomas is a regular 15 year old when he accompanies his grandfather on a job hunt. Not only he gets the job his grandfather wanted, he also becomes the center of a struggle that takes place between science and magic every 500 years. Twilight Inc. is intended for the teenage market. All comments appreciated especially about grammar since I really suck at it. Spanish is my first language so I struggle at english sometimes, especially punctuation and autocorrect software will only take me so far. I have a thick skin so you can take it apart if it needs it. Saludos! Julian

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A powerful staff is created to help protect the peaceful mage city of Magikar, but somehow dangerous outsiders learn of the magical item and they want it for themselves. Follow Daylor Godsend the Grand Wizard of the legendary city of Magikar - Zulfigar the renowned sorcerer, Ryon a clever half elf half human - the mighty fire demons of Teron - the ruthless King Travot of Brindale, Geralda'n a devious shape shifter as well as many other interesting and bizzare characters in search of the living staff. Some for good and some for evil - yet all are tangled in a web of high adventure, pure terror, intense action and even romance that will link them all together in the first book of three. The Staff of Valor - by Jason Sidelman I appreciate any and all that look at my work. I have been working on this over the past few years and believe its ready to be shown to the world. I am ready for the good and the bad comments you all have to tell. The novel is copywritten and if you could give me advice on a NY agent that also would be terrific. Thank you - Mr Fantasy - AKA Jason Sidelman I have already done a few reviews and will continue to keep that up on my end.

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The President of the United States had a big decision to make that night... sitting in the Situation Room with two conflicting intelligence reports; It was vividly aparent he had to act immidiately... What he didn't realise was everything he thought he knew about the past was wrong, and the world was going to tear open at the seams and launch itself into a global war of old school good versus evil. This is the story of several people who come together and rise when all hope seems lost. Everything you've ever heard about death and legend... is true. I know the grammer in this may not be the best... If you do proof it, please be kind... I haven't exacly polished it the way it should be yet.

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Thank you for your comments! I am grateful for them. To answer sonny, my mother's tongue is spanish. I was since very young in a bilingual school in Mexico and learned English in a military Academy in Missouri. I'm happy to tell That I've developed a very thick skin about comments and rejections, specially regarding grammar since it is obviously not my forte. I've made changes to the story taking in consideration all the comments, I agree with most of them and I hope that the changes I've made work better than the original. I don't kbnow if the way I introduced James' last name works better than the original. Saludos! Julian

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The tenderhearted warrior, King Jona Tye, is trapped in a ferocious struggle with his son, a bitter prince who would destroy their world before letting anyone else rule it. And so the king adopts eleven humans through the power of a mystical friend who's able to clone a life by taking a sample of its soul. Through this ability, King Jona rediscovers the joys of fatherhood and raises the greatest heroes to ever fight in the War of the Brokenhearted. However, the portions of the souls are sent back to their original owners because of the strain of the war. Yet, it is the king's hope that his adopted children will return and fill the hole in his fighting force, just as they filled the hole left in his heart by his rebellious son. But the humans are overwhelmed. First, there is the emergence of supernatural powers. Next, inner turmoil reaches the boiling point as the eleven recall a terrible war and a family they never actually experienced. And then there's Quest City: a metropolis where mobsters run city hall and the meaning of family is as blurred as the bullets that dictate the town's policies. Unbelievable powers rest at their fingertips. And an entire kingdom prays for their heroics. But in the end, it is the ability of these eleven strangers to value themselves as a family that will determine the fate of the king's world, as well as their own.

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An idea for an English creative writing unit im doing atm. It's based on a myth I love, starting half way through. It's based on the goddess Rhiannon. Let me know what you think. I've re-done the ending of this, but I havn't tey had a chance to have a look at editing the rest! Please tell me your comments on whether this ending wraps up te story better...and if it tells you the reasons for her being framed etc...and if you can work out who stole the baby! =D

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Don that perfect outfit, and you can play the part.

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I don't know really... playing with thoughts and words

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Ever imagine what a poet dreams?

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Redemption, Arkansas is a small country town where things aren't always what they seem and the people never are...

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A man is offered a new life to replace his old one.

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To whom does The People's Champion belong? The people or himself? That's the question foundling(orphan) Jakund Frey'lnd, a gifted young swordsman and war hero dubbed "Kid Blade," struggles with as he battles the ferocious Gothari and learns that his fame as warrior makes him a target for those looking to make a name for themself as well as an unwilling player in the games of the powerful. This is a Young Adult Fantasy, filled with humor and action, designed to appeal to all ages.

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The world in which we live is changing drastically. Science and technology are taking us to levels of existence hitherto deemed impossible. But where has man really progressed? Just a few thoughts.

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In this era where science fiction is becoming science fact, technology is mixing with strongly held myths, and art is blending the chaos to shine a light on the rapid changes, we will either destroy ourselves or else learn to live in peace, without and within. This is the story of a particularly gifted young psychic, Aurora Swift, and the psychiatrist who tries to unravel her worlds, and in doing so unintentionally comes into contact with interconnected universal mysteries, dimensions, ancient beings and civilizations. Mixture of fantasy and reality genres. Mainly, the two settings are the modern day present with a bit of government conspiracy, and a sort of underworld that Aurora calls the Night World she escapes into to keep her sanity intact what with the pressures of her life. We meet a lot of other psychics in Aurora's circle and travel all over the U.S. and the world in search of some type of salvation. ** The first six or so chapters are non-linear and deliberately jarring as Aurora is experiencing a crossover of dimensions and times that will be sorted out in later chapters.// If I were to summarize the emotional stew or message of the story, it might go something like this: It is easy to wonder if our lives are worthless and actions are pointless because all will be forgotten one day. If every inventor, thinker, artist, intuitive being, and scientist followed through with this line of thinking, we’d still be in the Dark Ages or perhaps cause a new one. In this time of flourishing light, we need not allow the darkness of short-sightedness envelop us. The power is within us to make this world whatever we want it to be and become. And yes, one can make a difference with a little help from her friends.// **NOTE: I am on this site for constructive criticism. If you believe my work is only worthy of a 1 or 2 and feel like writing a snide scathing review or telling me how to write according to you, go somewhere else. My work isn't perfect, but I what I don't need is people who wish to feel superior by cutting me down or taking out their bad day on me. If you "don't get it" either ask me why something is written as it is or read something else. That I've had to explain this is sad, but there are plenty of A-holes in the world and that is reflected by similar percentages on this site. For those of you here to learn and grow and offer positive suggestions: Welcome. ---- (4/23/09 Currently reposted Chapter 1-3 and more coming soon for fans old and new).

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A young woman is found dead inside a locked house. Is it a natural death or is there something sinister involved?

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Warning: this novel has at least four levels, is full of sex and violence, and is very fast paced. The Well of Women is at risk, as is the Tourney which Rhiannon wishes to use for pride and peace. But there are riots against offworlders, who the people blame for the rash of mother hate that is spreading through the land. And there is the mysterious Maelan--supposed guardian of the Well, whose malfunction may explain the evil that is afoot.

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In the land of Rystria the villages and towns have enjoyed a long period of peace and prosperity. The Miner's Guild is responsible for collecting the rich metals and minerals from their lands. But evil lurks from across the sea, a new leader has risen in the lands of Vistilan. Arianna is a young seamstress from the village of Fairedge. She knows little of the world around her and lives a simple life with her mother. When her father dies and leaves a huge debt, Arianna finds herself traveling farm from home to work in the mines to pay off that debt. Within Arianna is a power that will be pivotal in battling the forces of Vistilan.

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He fell through a portal to encounter a strange world. He sought vengence on those who were responsible. This is going to be an entry into a flash fiction contest, so please let me know what you think. Thanks in advance.

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11/05/09

Reposted by request.

The current status of Static Mayhem is that I have yet to find an agent to represent it. I haven't given up on it, but I am currently focusing my energy on my next novel, Caprice. I am still happy to take critique on either book.

Meanwhile, I have started posting the beginning of a sequel to Static Mayhem. I hope to get the bulk of a first draft written this year, but Caprice took me six years to write, so I don't know how realistic that is. We'll see.

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Two forces drive Harrison Cody to trek from New England to Chicago on foot: a bewildering pixie named Glimmer, and Claudia, the voice on the radio who may be the only other human still alive.

Static Mayhem, a mainstream novel that weaves elements of Fairy Tale, Science Fiction and Horror into a contemporary setting, tells his story. Harrison's journey reveals a North America whose human population has been replaced by dinosaurs, demons and dragons, and whose infrastructure has been reduced to a smattering of buildings holding artifacts from Earth's past and future. For all the surreal obstacles of his environment, his greatest challenge proves to be the care of two young survivors, separately orphaned and in clear need of a parent. Their eventual arrival in Chicago is punctuated by his arrest, and after clearing himself and establishing a life in this new cradle of civilization, he finds that his unanswered questions pale in importance to his new family.

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For a thousand years civilized realms have lived in the shadow of the ratmen, a vicious warrior race kept in check by their willingness to slaughter one another. But now the necromancer Demos Azari has summoned a demon lord to gather the ratmen under one banner and march on the lands of men and dwarves. Only one group of heros, the Magician Aaron, the halfling Walley Highspirt, the Paladin Thomas Grey, the dwarf Maximilian, and the dark elf Anastazja hold to key to stopping Demos before the world is engulfed in darkness.

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Danny Marx is abruptly torn from his unpromising life as an average office grunt, by a woman he's had a crush on for weeks before actually meeting her. Now facing a series of unexpected and confusing threats, he finds that the more he learns about Caprice, the less sense she makes to him.

This book is a bit of an experiment for me on several levels, not the least of which is to find out whether I am capable of writing a short novel.

NOTE TO POTENTIAL REVIEWERS: As with any novel, the point of entry should be chapter one. With Caprice in particular, if you jump in anywhere else, you will almost certainly miss the entire point of the story. That danger will increase exponentially as I add more chapters. The kind of feedback I need more than anything else is about plot and character development, so latecomer reviews, while well-intentioned, won't be of value. Please start from the beginning.

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Rhiannon, prodigal daughter of the king of New Fairy, has suffered a terrible curse. Having humiliated a witch, she must suffer a unique shame--she must go naked, regardless of the weather or social situation. These are the stories of how she reclaims her dignity and fights the evil of men, and her own inner conflicts. Many of these are more light hearted than Rhiannon's Ordeal, and show Rhiannon in the heroic capacity that emerged in her post-curse life. Rhiannon's relationship with Rosalyn is more ambiguous--at least to Rhiannon; I don't think the reader was ever fooled. There are other differences, but I don't think that should matter to the reader. Rhiannon's still her dear, sweet, naked self.

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