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This is the pitch for The Legend of Draconis, Book I: King Satin's Realm. (Usually referred to as King Satin's Realm) I have included poetry. com and TNBW in my bio--Good or bad? I'm not sure. This is a piece still very much under revision, but it is my labor of love. This piece kept me sane at the lowest point of my life.

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I am looking for all opinions here. Anything you have to offer will be appreciated. Thank you in advance. Namaste C.J.

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Tis my book pitch for the contest. Never wrote one of these before so... Be harsh if you must. I am trying to win after all, so if you see something you think should be fixed, moved, or obliterated don't hesitate to let me know. Also good feedback is always welcome. Let me know what you liked about it as much as what you hated. Thanks to those of you that commented already you've helped me a lot :)

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This is the pitch and query for Wilted Magnolias. Not sure I should include poetry.com since I've been told long after thought I had been chosen to have a poem published that it's "vanity publishing." BUT why would I NOT include this wonderful site, TNBW that is, for an agent or such to know I've worked on this piece? All thoughts welcome. Edited 10/30/11

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This is the pitch for Homegrown Healer. Would this make you want to read? Yes, I've included poetry.com, although I've been told it's "vanity publishing," which I didn't know at the time. Morever, I included TNBW in a query so an agent or publisher will know I've worked on this piece. Edited 10/30/11

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Would this grab your attention and make you want to read? Yes, I've included poetry.com, not knowing when I created this it was "vanity publishing" and TNBW because this site has helped me so much. This happens to be the query I sent to the agent that requested and now has my entire manuscript.

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Danny is coming home after a year in an active Army Reserve unit servingin Afghanistan, and our new house has to be ready.

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The layers of paint on an old house compared to layers of life.

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This is for the best pitch contest. I welcome all reviews and commentary. This is my first attempt at a query letter so please let me know how it sounds.

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This is the beginning of a modern love story, set in Qatar, a small country in the Middle East and the male protagonist is trying to escape the family pressure to get married. I'd like to know if the story is engaging and if the characters are interesting.

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Sex, lies, and standardized test fraud at an upscale suburban private school – as seen through the eyes of a “fish out of water” divorced working class mom, whose 12-year-old genius son has been recruited by the headmaster for nefarious purposes.

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Is this a good start or not. What jars?

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In the land of sun, surf, and celebrity, someone is murdering Catholic priests, and the lives of three of Southern California’s citizens have become hopelessly intertwined. Dizzy, a homeless ex-Marine wanted for desertion, has been running for years. Haunted by his memories of Iraq and the girl he had failed to save there, he has run from the military and toward the solace only the bottle can bring. Now, after a jogger finds him standing next to the body of a butchered priest, Dizzy is running from the law. Detective Patrick McConnell is an honest homicide cop in a corrupt division. He knows Dizzy from the streets, and despite the fact that all the evidence points to him as the killer, McConnell believes the homeless man is innocent. Hindered by the shady cops in his division, he races against time to clear Dizzy’s name and learn the true identity of the killer before he can strike again. Father Peter Sewell has recently been recently released from a mental hospital, where the state had sent him after the priest claimed that the Virgin Mary had ordered him to commit a sexual assault. Now living under the name Kelly Cochran, he will, through Her divine guidance, mete out justice against those who have defrocked him. Psychological crime thriller FOR THE BLESSED VIRGIN is 94,000 words.

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Twelve women are dead! Now, a thirteenth is missing as an unpredictable serial killer stalks the usually small, peaceful town of Eau Bouease, Louisiana, in Lucky Thirteen, a suspense packed thriller coupled with a twist on the impact of love other than romantic love. From a small town in Mississippi, Larkin Sloan is a dedicated teacher who finds herself in a struggle for her life against a sadistic serial killer bent on ritualistic sacrifice. When she awakes chained to a bed by a mysterious man, Larkin realizes she is the thirteenth intended victim in a string of brutal slayings. As Larkin works to convince her captor to set her free, Detective Raiford “Ray��? Reynolds investigates twelve horrific murders. He becomes obsessed with finding the thirteenth victim before she becomes another statistic. Along with his partner, Special Agent Christine Milovich, he investigates the thirteenth disappearance of a woman who seems to have nothing in common with the other twelve victims and discovers the impact of love from a source he never knew existed. Captive, captor, and law enforcement join forces to defeat a sinister killer in a rollercoaster of intrigue, deception, and tumultuous relationships. Lucky Thirteen will keep readers on the edge of their seats anticipating the next turn of events. Feedback desired--whatever you think needs to be said. Strength of topic, dialogue, character development, etc.

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Regardless of the outcome of the Stronest Start competition, I'm seeking feedback as to the aspects of my writing and the ability to hook the reader to want to read the next chapter. I'll tell you right now, the killer is NOT who you think it will be from reading the early chapters!

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This is a thriller set in the near future. Night Killer is the second in a three-book "Killer" series. This chapter describes the strange mental illness suffered by a United States Senator and the resulting suicide.

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"We Own The President" (set a few years in future; 116,000 words) Why it’s unique: father-daughter buddy story meets 007-type thriller... Harry Evans works for secret government agencies, sees himself as the last line of defense against the evil people in the world. He’s good at it. Kate Evans, studying for an MBA at Wharton, is contemptuous of her father and has as little to do with him as possible. After all, he’s nothing but a killer... Readers get a big swirling thriller--mad-genius twins try to "own the President"--plus entertaining inter-generational conflict. Harry Evans, daughter Kate, and her friend Carmen are increasingly in the center of the vortex, not sure what is real or where their loyalties should be. The country is coming apart. President Simpson declares war on Mexico, and hints at worst. Kate and Harry, alone against the world, start to function as partners -- but don’t try to tell Kate that. The question is, can these two alphas stop squabbling long enough to save the country from a conspiracy to seize control of the president and to accomplish this in a way that conceals what has happened. Any feedback is welcome.

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Big Red comes home to roost.

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Finally a home at last.

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Two together on the long road home.

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SOMETHING HAS ARRIVED IN A QUIET LAKE BORDERING THE FLORIDA EVERGLADES, SOMETHING BIG!

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NOT YOUR USUAL DINNER AT EIGHT

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