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 | The Faceless Boy of Lucid Dreams | Zer0 | Poetry | Poetry | 6 | 0.55 | Feb 19, 2011 |
Summary:I'm not sure how to condense it into a summary so just read the poem.Chapters: |
| The Watcher A New Beginning | emarie | Novel | Religion and Spirituality | 7 | n/a | Jan 22, 2010 |
Summary:The Cloud hovers 6,000 feet in the center of Las Vegas. Lightning rumbles through the darkened cloud as The Watcher reacts to what he sees going on in Vegas. He calls for its destruction like he had in Egypt, Sodom and Gomorrah. But to do so the archangel Michael will have to get permission from God allow it.Chapters: |
| Apostles of the Cloud | kevdarts | Short Story | Other | 10 | 2.56 | Jan 10, 2010 |
Summary:Two religious scientists discover a secret for curing drug addiction, and use a cloud to release it on Las Vegas. Big D, who runs the Vegas drug trade, is not amused by the drop in sales. The cloud takes on a life of its own, and the scientists and Big D must deal with the consequences as their lives come crashing together.
I have a thick skin and enjoy a thorough critique. Let me know if you enjoyed the story, and I appreciate any nits and suggestions for improvement.
Specifics:
-Do the biblical references come through? Are they too subtle? Too obvious?
-What about the comparisons and contrasts between addiction and religious fanatacism?
-Given that my main character is evil (Big D), how does he come across. Entertaining? Scary? Not scary enough?
Interesting trivia for your enjoyment:
-There really is a Shrine of the Most Holy Redeemer in Vegas, and yes it does have the cloud picture.
-Vegas gets about 5" of rainfall a year on average.
-Microbes do live in the droplets of water in rainclouds, and some scientists believe their presence can effect when the clouds drop rain by altering the temperature at which the water in the clouds freezes.
I finished edits on January 19, 2010. Thanks for your helpful reviews!Chapters: |
| The Travels of Einstein and a friend | Oscar Hutson | Short Story | Literary Fiction | 3 | 1.38 | Jan 6, 2010 |
Summary:The spirits of Einstein and Max Planck are on a journey through time and space to other galaxies to study different worlds and the secrets of the Universe. They find there are similar spirits from stars far away visiting their own planet.Chapters: |
