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This is not a traditional fantasy story. There's no magic or uncanny powers, just extraordinary feats required of ordinary people. Set in a world of swords and castles, unwitting humanity teeters on the brink of annihilation at the hands of a mysterious and ancient race of giants known as the Vawgrim. A group of young war survivors must overcome their devastating personal losses along with their own trepidation to join a hardened disfigured mercenary in an epic attempt to thwart a vengeful crusade centuries in the planning.

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This is the second part of my novel - White Swan - It deals with the Chinese invasion of South Vietnam and their initial success. I'm looking for help in structuring this novel so it can reach publication - Please give me your best thoughts!

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In the First Age a gifted race, the Felwarn, were created to guard mankind from the evil god of that world. Over the ages the Felwarn withdrew from humanity and eventually became distant legends from an ancient world.

Now, in the Fifth Age, a new generation of Felwarn are leaving their safe homeland to take the traditional road of initiation. Felwarn law decrees they must keep their identity and powers hidden from humans.
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NOTE: Chapter numbers have changed. Chapter 1 is now the prologue, and so forth. The prologue is now a stand alone chapter/story. If you have comments about this please share them. Because I'm still not sure it is the right thing to do. Thank you for reading

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This is hopefully a final revision of a novel I started here a while back called The Old Mill. It is most likely a middle grade novel, but I don't see a category for that. I'm looking forward to some good feedback, including what do you think of the title change?

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INTRODUCTION: War .. but not a serious war. It would be over by the weekend and everyone would be back at the beach. And it wasn't our war. We weren't involved. It wouldn't reach our part of the city. None of us was going to get hurt ...

READER GUIDANCE: Not so much a war-story, as a story in a war.

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This is the sequel to Static Mayhem. It's been on the back burner for some time now, but I recently unearthed the few sketches I have for it, and I think it may be time to start fleshing it out. So far, I'm just calling it Static Mayhem 2, although my notes have the working title Mayhospheres. Since the original title for Static Mayhem was "Big Yellow Taxi", I don't have the best faith in my ability to name things, so I'm going to leave this approximately untitled for the time being.

For those of you who read the first book, this story takes place eight years later, and focuses on the children (some adopted, some biological) of some of the characters from it. New readers are welcome, but should be aware that this may not carry as a stand alone story. I guess we'll find out.

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Draft of a query letter for a Paranormal Adventure novel (it has paranormal and romance, but from the protag's gender to their separation and more, it just doesn't fit within the paranormal romance sub-genre). Intended for submission to book agents to rep fiction. Critique away! nb: this is a query to entice, not the full plot revealed in the synopsis

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Mankind faces Armageddon as terrorism, war, and the reality of civilization gone mad is thrust upon the world when atomic weapons fall into the hands of Al Quida terrorists. That is the motivation that transcends religious belief, culture, and the foreign affairs of nations as Aaliya’s Song unfolds against a backdrop of a world living in fear. Aaliya’s Song, is a historic novel in the classic style that captures the essence of America’s Middle East experience and blends it against its own mélange of violence and political intrigue in a manner similar to how James Clavell’s Shogun romanced the conflict between the divisions in European Christianity and Samurai Japan, and how Tai Pan epitomized the struggle of racial and political extremism. Spread across the panorama of greed, revolution, political difference, and religious cataclysm, Aaliya’s Song brings home the fears and half-truths of a half century that has cast a pall of terror and evil across the planet. But in this chilling environment, heroes arise and overcome their religious and political beliefs in an effort to save mankind from nuclear holocaust. Aaliyas Song brings this powerful endeavor to life as it tells its story through the eyes of two very different main characters. For Major Brian Scanlon, a U. S. Marine Corps aviator, the Islamic world was an alien and hostile place filled with zealots, fanaticism, and oppression. For Aaliya bint Qudamah, Princess of Dar and Noori, and daughter of the Emir of Rabeè, America is a foreign dogma that threatens to bring her father and her nation to its knees. Thrown together by the intrigue that surrounds a country’s civil war, and a world grappling with the dark cloud of terror, Scanlon and Aaliya join their forces and lives in an effort to stop the death of her country, and a coup de état in the United States; acts that can only lead to a worldwide Jihad . . . a third world war. To win, they must overcome the Iraqi military, the schemes of Islamic clerics bent on returning the world to fundamentalism, an ages-old family of assassins, treason at the highest levels of the United States government, and the transfer of atomic weapons to Al Quida zealots. Eventually, these two young patriot-warriors find themselves questioning their beliefs, their religion, and their heritage, but never that which, above all else, they must have faith in . . . each other. Aaliya’s Song introduces and maneuvers a rich and fascinating cast of characters in Ryanne Littner, the first female President of the United States, and Jamie Simmons, U. S. Secret Service agent. These characters, along with Prince Rashid bin Qudamah, and Qudamah Abu Shareef, Emir of Rabeè spin a web of intrigue and ambition that the world is obligated to live or die with. Virulent nationalism, and ancient ethnic and religious hatreds fan the flames of war, this time with nuclear weapons in the hands of Al Quida as the ultimate threat. The story of a love so powerful that it transcends religion, politics, and the hatred born out of difference, Aaliya’s Song has the immediacy and punch of today’s fears and tomorrow’s headlines. Exciting, frighteningly plausible, and absolutely believable, Aaliya’s Song is an ambitious and explosive story of life, love, and intrigue.

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Circus performer and dwarf-tossing business entrepreneur Digby Clover has a Brad Pitt face, John Holmes in the basement, and a heaping helping of Napoleon’s complex, all wrapped in an Oompa Loompa-sized package. When a rogue terrorist murders and steals the cell phone of Digby's seven-foot business partner, the dwarf's life implodes as the stolen phone mistakenly calls Digby, his answering machine recording from a pocket dial only half the horrible plan to detonate a suitcase nuke somewhere in St. Louis. Desperate to save his hometown from devastation, Digby drunkenly and unwittingly teams with rookie Secret Service Agent Bill Smithson. First apart, then together, they embark on a frantic quest, leading to a packed St. Louis stadium, to find the terrorists and avert tragedy The Pocket Dial proves that sometimes the biggest problems call for small solutions. I'm looking for honest assessments of plot, style, etc.

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This novel involves three lives caught up in the miserable web of slavery. Desperation and vengeance drive the three main characters: Assad, a moor and military man is betrayed by an empire that is being torn apart; Alain Gravois, the son of a fisherman, living in Nantes, France, struggles to become his own man; and Osawe, a warrior, living in a small village situated between two warring kingdoms along the 'slave coast' of Africa, struggles to survive. France, the 'slave coast' of Africa, Morocco and Haiti are the backdrop to their story which spans twenty-three years, 1727 to 1750. All criticism is welcome, and thanks to all who have helped.

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Eolyn is the story of love and magic tested by dogma, war and shifting loyalties. Set in the Kingdom of Moisehen, it forces two friends into opposite sides of a violent conflict, the outcome of which will determine the fate of a millennial tradition of sorcery. Any feedback is welcome. Feel free to pick up the story at a middle or late chapter if you prefer, but please keep in mind that many plot elements will have been set up prior to the chapter you read. Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I hope you enjoy!

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Written as a ballad for main character in the Cable Hornman series about a traveling bard.

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*************PLEASE TAKE NOTE, THIS HAS BEEN ABANDONED FOR THE RE-WRITE******************* (I have performed a major rewrite and changed the title.) This novel involves three lives caught up in the miserable web of slavery. Desperation and vengeance drive the three main characters: Alain Gravois, the son of a fisherman living in Nantes, France, struggles to become his own man; Osawe, a warrior, living in a small village situated between two warring kingdoms along the 'slave coast' of Africa, struggles to survive; and Assad, a moor, and military man, is betrayed by an empire that is being torn apart. France, the 'slave coast' of Africa, Morocco and Haiti are the backdrop to their story which spans twenty-three years, 1727 to 1750. All criticism is welcome.

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Follow along with young Cable Hornman as he ventures forth into the mystical Lands of Methanasia. He leaves the home of his foster parents in the northern provinces of the Dane-Klyve and travels south to the old city of Smeln, the once magnificent capital of the declining Western Empire. In hopes of perfecting his swordsmanship and fighting skills, Cable joins up with the Fighting Ninth of the city guards. Little does he know that another traveler has also entered the city for evil purposes. This selection is no longer available for review except for the epilogue.

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This is rhiannon on Rhiannon expanded; as suggested. It has an ending, is either more truthful or it is not. Remember when I tell you anything about this story that "I am Lying Now."

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A Re-boot of the Rhiannon series. It rewrites the first Rhiannon story (published elsewhere)The Gorgon. It is deliberately inconsistent with other stories published or workshopped. Rhiannon is more complicated, Rosalyn has a different status, it is in 3rd person. It has themes of transformation,the loss and reclamation of important things (although they are not what the characters or readers think at first). A word on its setting: this is not set in medieval Europe. It takes place on a world that is about 11th century in terms of its social and technological development, but is 30 lightyears away from Earth, which is occupied by a world (Terra) with 21st century development. It takes place in our future, but in that world's (worlds') past. One culture is corrupted by Terran society, others are not. Oddities like the characters using slang from the US c. 2009 is thus explained. It is the tale of the fall and rise of Rhiannon, the ever so great descendent of the lengendary woman/goddess of the same name. All feedback is appreciated. Thank you.

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My novel "Goodbody" is a mystery which examines the deteriorating financial system in the United States.

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This book explores the curiosity and fearless determination of youth. It takes place long ago and revolves around Kate Powers, a nineteen year old who reluctantly accepts an enchanted package filled with 'tools' to start her on the journey of a lifetime. Her pursuit opens the door to magic, mystery, and a family history she could never have imagined. I am looking forward to and will appreciate any and all feedback.

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Thirteen-year-old Tyler Bradley is sent to stay in Moon Bay at his aunt and uncle's chip shop. Nothing in the antiquated seaside town is what he expected. The chip shop is decorated with strange symbols, there are gigantic, primeval birds nesting in the cliffs and, worst of all, he discovers a sad and horrible story attached to the gothic mansion at the tip of the headland. When Tyler meets skateboarder, Jenner, they join forces to get to the bottom of the mysteries permeating the town. The problem is working out just which townfolk are working for the agents of good and which are working for the agents of darkness. And in this confusing atmosphere, how does Tyler know he can trust his aunt and uncle, after all, their chip shop is called, Wish and Chips... This novel is intended for 10-14 year olds and I would value any feedback, thanks.

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This is a semi-autobiographical work of fiction, in the likes of James Joyce. It is told in the first person, and the protagonist relates his adventures around Boston and New York. The hero of the story is a young man who has already gone through his Bildungsroman and knows who he is - a scholar of Greek and Latin - he just doesn't know what to do now, or what kind of job he'll get. While everyone else is in the 21st century, the protagonist views the world through a prism of marble and papyrus. The novel is divided into five parts. Part I begins in medias res (flashbacks throughout the story fill in prior details), with the protagonist graduating college and admittedly preparing to go to graduate school because he does not know what to do with his degree. Many characters are introduced, as well as preliminary Latin Grammar terms. Part II takes place during the summer before graduate school, and it ends with the protagonist moving to New York to begin the program. The main character feels trapped living in an apartment with his longtime girlfriend, but finally escapes to New York – the girlfriend representing a postmodern version of Calypso from The Odyssey. Other themes of Part II include how the Classics have influenced modern math, science, and medicine. Part III covers the first year of graduate school, introduces characters in New York, and overwhelms the reader with all the sights and sounds of America’s modern Rome. The theme of Part III is how the Classics have influenced modern art, architecture, theater and music. Part IV covers the second year of graduate school, with the main character feeling burnt out by school and living in New York. The theme of Part IV is how the Classics have influenced modern government, politics, and law. Part V concludes with the protagonist moving back to Boston and finding a job as a Latin teacher. The theme of Part V is how the Classics have influenced modern religion and philosophy. The irony is that, while the protagonist understands that his degree encompasses so many areas of knowledge, he realizes that the entire story he has been educating the reader. In the end, he becomes a teacher. Throughout the novel, allusions and references to Greek and Latin abound.

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A day I will always remember when my Goddaughters were just 8 and 5 years old.

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The United States Air Force has contracted American Aerotechnics, a private jet builder with a lot of resources, with the extraordinary feat of building the fastest, most advanced spy plane in the world. With complete project success just around the corner, Jim (Agent Stroker) is tasked by the International Intelligence Agency to make the jet disappear; it is much too advanced and will surely upset the stability of the world no matter who is in control of the sophisticated piece of aeronautical ingenuity. Through inside channels, the Libyans and Russians are aware of the jet and desperately want to gain control of it. Plans for selling the jet are made, sending Agent Stroker to certain death if he succeeds with his mission. This new fiction spy novel sets the stage for a new spy series with intriguing characters and a powerfully suspenseful plot that will keep you wanting more! I'm looking for constructive feedback to improve my story and to help put the final touches to my first fiction novel.

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A truly remarkable tale of love and endurance through the battles and struggles of the world’s best loved King -Arthur, as he strove to bring peace and prosperity to Britain by stopping the incessant in-fighting and uniting the country against the Saxon hordes. Laying the foundations of a better way of life for his people and the country that would last for many years. A man of passion and foresight, a born leader and diplomat who devoted his life, and eventually gave it, as he battled against internal strife and the ever present Saxon threat. He continued the task that Uther had started, but he was a far better King than his father, their characters differed greatly. Arthur was a man of the people and for the people, seeking to ease their burden in life and to be proud of their heritage, working together for the benefit of all. As King he let it be widely known that he was approachable by anyone, whatever their rank and station in life and would seek to resolve their problems or mediate on their behalf. Young or old they were all of equal importance in his eyes, the young because they were the future of his country and the old for their wisdom and advice. No stone was left unturned as he sought to bring his vision into reality, admitting that he was only human and would make mistakes, but he would quickly learn from them. A great exponent of ‘service to others, before service to self,’ that contributed much to his success throughout his life. The tension is there as this remarkable young boy, turned King, left his mark on history as he pursued his destiny with compassion and total commitment, losing his wife Gwenhwyfar in the process. He could not have done it alone, and in this respect much was due to Merlin and the other Elders that secretly prepared him for his life as High King, and continued to advise him until the end. His sword Excalibur, given to him by the Lady of the Lake, gave him the protection that he needed, put fear into the hearts of his enemies and aided him in many mystical ways. This is a magical insight into his real life as it happened, not just another mystical fantasy. I feel as if I knew him well. Enjoy the story. ................. All comments are welcome

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Moonlight Montecristo is the incredible story about an average family guy named Jack Bennett, a husband, father and history teacher and USAF Veteran with connections in the intelligence community. Jack unexpectedly finds himself in the middle of a secret underground Anti-Castro assassination plot, partly due to his love for cigars. Moonlight Montecristo is a story about murder and adventure that takes Jack from Massachusetts to Montreal and from Miami and to the shores of Baracoa, Cuba. It’s a story of a friend’s loyalty, revenge and a mother’s redemption. Beautifully written as the story weaves the reader through time, intrigue and adventure. A truely shocking ending that will captivate you. A story that you will never forget.

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When Glory Rattinuss falls in love with Cosmos Sharpteeth,she doesn't realise the opposition to their marriage will involve a long, perilous journey to the Shining Mountains. This is a children's fantasy fiction novella.

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This is the story of two boys who encounter a dilemma while trying to solve another.

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With time growing short, and still so much to do, Mai and her friends have to work extra hard. After being lied to and betrayed by her so-called-friend, Sam, Mai and her new friends are on a race against time to find the other Chosen Ones. They are the protectors of the planet Solaria, who fled to Earth, seeking refuge when another planet—Romokka—attacked their home planet. The people of Solaria live secretly among the people of Earth, and Mai and her friends have to find ten of them. No one had ever dared to stand up to Romokka before. All who had tried before had fallen. Mai and her friends are determined to defend Earth and fight back. But with the Fire Tribe on Romokka’s side, they have many enemies. General Karan, Fudo, Soren, and Sam are just a few of them. But they have even more allies. They only chance they have of stopping Romokka is to locate all the Chosen Ones. But to find them, they must travel to the Solarian Islands—which is were most of the Solarians evacuated to. With things getting so hectic, Mai can never be sure what to expect from this new world she has just discovered.

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This is a story I am writing for my son. Xochiel is an average fifteen-year-old teenager. She's depressed, she's failing English, and her mother keeps taking her cell phone away because she talks all hours the day with her boyfriend. Oh, two weeks ago, she learned she had super speed. And, her super hearing is making her insane. Average, right?

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How dangerous could an assistant librarian job be? Thomas is a regular 15 year old when he accompanies his grandfather on a job hunt. Not only he gets the job his grandfather wanted, he also becomes the center of a struggle that takes place between science and magic every 500 years. Twilight Inc. is intended for the teenage market. All comments appreciated especially about grammar since I really suck at it. Spanish is my first language so I struggle at english sometimes, especially punctuation and autocorrect software will only take me so far. I have a thick skin so you can take it apart if it needs it. Saludos! Julian

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This is a love quest, a story about family secrets in the age of sex, drugs, and rock-n-roll. While American youth were growing their hair, experimenting with psychotropic drugs and protesting the Vietnam War, I was running for my life to Alaska, hoping to outdistance my troubled, murky past and vanquish the demons in my head. I knew my past was dark, but I did not know it all. The storyline is a progressive quest for adventure, self-discovery, and enlightenment with more twists and turns than a Texas sidewinder: from a six-month cruise in the Caribbean to a jail in California; from a cabin in the Sierra Nevada to a remote river camp in the Trinity Mountains; from the Aleutian Islands to Hawaii. Wrapped in a riddle with psychological and paranormal overtones, the story embodies the adolescent spirit of romance, rebellion and idealism, and celebrates the contention that given even less than half a chance, life not only endures...it prevails.

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Beautiful, talented, and about to inherit – Why is Sarah’s heart in turmoil...? Sarah Miller, the new darling of the Chamber Music Society, the protégée cellist of their in-house Quartet, receives rave reviews for her first series of concerts. She has just buckled her last term at New York’s prestigious music academy of Julliard when a hit-and-run driver strikes her down and disrupts her plans. Luckily unscathed, engagements still need postponing until proper exercises can restore agility and full mobility to her bruised wrist. While the melody is interrupted, Sarah meets up with the formidable Spinner brothers. The younger Mark, handsome and charming, sweeps her off her feet. The elder Julian, black sheep, black belted, and daunting black mood enjoys badgering and humiliating her. Her wrist recovered, playing music again, Sarah wonders which exercises will mend a bruised ego and an aching heart. ...Perhaps it’s because she is unworldly, unsophisticated – an orphan raised by tutors and nannies who ran to the bright lights of New York City...only to slam into the dark heart of Julian Spinner.

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An adventure story for young readers when Ken Carter and Allison Smith discover the secret mystery of the emerald pool.

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Redemption, Arkansas is a small country town where things aren't always what they seem and the people never are...

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Beloved, aging comedian Buddy White signs a deal to play Vegas for one final performance, a fantastic send-off segueing into a well-deserved retirement. He wants to give his loyal audience a last memorable performance. Without warning he is shuffled off to Hell by mistake. When the misanthrope demon that grabbed him realizes the error, he abandons him outside the gate. Buddy can't get in. So he sets off to find his way back home. He follows the Acheron upriver on a journey that grows increasingly bizarre. Meanwhile, Hell's authorities learn of the blunder and send out a posse to round up the errant comedian. At the same time, Heaven discovers the mistake and dispatches a Chorus of Angels to find Buddy and rush him to Heaven. Buddy is determined to elude them all and get back to Earth. He's never missed a show or broken a promise in his entire professional life and he isn't about to start now. The prospect of a dead comedian playing to a live audience in Vegas would badly upset the status quo so Heaven and Hell join forces, determined to stop him. As Buddy perseveres, his natural cheer and success at evading the bungling bureaucrats of the afterlife begins to bring hope to the damned. By degrees he finds himself at the head of a revolution. All Buddy wants is to go home.

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To whom does The People's Champion belong? The people or himself? That's the question foundling(orphan) Jakund Frey'lnd, a gifted young swordsman and war hero dubbed "Kid Blade," struggles with as he battles the ferocious Gothari and learns that his fame as warrior makes him a target for those looking to make a name for themself as well as an unwilling player in the games of the powerful. This is a Young Adult Fantasy, filled with humor and action, designed to appeal to all ages.

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A girl brought up as a con artist, is now a grown woman who accidently falls in love with her next victim. She is framed by her colleagues and now must prove her love and her innocence to a man who's convinced she is a criminal. If she doesn't, she is going to lose her freedom, and most importantly her heart.

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The true story of a cute little dog who came into our lives one fine day, only to go out of it again. This tale is set in India, my homeland...

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In the Amazon jungle a group of individuals undergo a rescue mission. What they find is a race for their lives and they are hunted every step. What is it that chases them, the mythological Curupira, or could it be something far worse.... I have not been dedicating as much time as I had hoped for this so I'm really going to buckle down. At this point, I want to get the story moving forward. I know there are some rough spots and I appreciate whenever someone points them out to me. As the chapters progress there may be some patches that seem like they aren't fully flushed out yet, that's intentional because I have plans to return and work on the scene, include some backstory, or clarify some foreshadowing that is needed.

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11/05/09

Reposted by request.

The current status of Static Mayhem is that I have yet to find an agent to represent it. I haven't given up on it, but I am currently focusing my energy on my next novel, Caprice. I am still happy to take critique on either book.

Meanwhile, I have started posting the beginning of a sequel to Static Mayhem. I hope to get the bulk of a first draft written this year, but Caprice took me six years to write, so I don't know how realistic that is. We'll see.

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Two forces drive Harrison Cody to trek from New England to Chicago on foot: a bewildering pixie named Glimmer, and Claudia, the voice on the radio who may be the only other human still alive.

Static Mayhem, a mainstream novel that weaves elements of Fairy Tale, Science Fiction and Horror into a contemporary setting, tells his story. Harrison's journey reveals a North America whose human population has been replaced by dinosaurs, demons and dragons, and whose infrastructure has been reduced to a smattering of buildings holding artifacts from Earth's past and future. For all the surreal obstacles of his environment, his greatest challenge proves to be the care of two young survivors, separately orphaned and in clear need of a parent. Their eventual arrival in Chicago is punctuated by his arrest, and after clearing himself and establishing a life in this new cradle of civilization, he finds that his unanswered questions pale in importance to his new family.

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Rhiannon, prodigal daughter of the king of New Fairy, has suffered a terrible curse. Having humiliated a witch, she must suffer a unique shame--she must go naked, regardless of the weather or social situation. These are the stories of how she reclaims her dignity and fights the evil of men, and her own inner conflicts. Many of these are more light hearted than Rhiannon's Ordeal, and show Rhiannon in the heroic capacity that emerged in her post-curse life. Rhiannon's relationship with Rosalyn is more ambiguous--at least to Rhiannon; I don't think the reader was ever fooled. There are other differences, but I don't think that should matter to the reader. Rhiannon's still her dear, sweet, naked self.

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