Ohhhhhh noooooo I did a stupid thing.  Ang suggested I make my names more Welsh.  After thinking about it, I decided that was a good idea.  So Kamila becomes Emma, Daav becomes Dafyd, and Eliv becomes Evan (among others).  So I do a find/replace and it works great.  Unitl I replace Daav with Dafyd, then replace Eliv with Dafyd (because I was going too fast).  Now both my main male characters are named Dafyd.  Yup.  sucks.  I quickly replaced Dafyd with HELP so I could find all the names easily.  I am now in the process of replacing all the HELPs with either Dafyd or Evan.  OMG

I do like the feel of the Welsh names, however.

Okay, still polishing the ending.  Want to run something by you fans of the various revisions.  What if the water poison was just the beginning.  Some horses die, but some recover.  Those that are recovered catch some kind of viral infection (would have to be 'chest vapors' or something) with different symptoms?  Then later, Becca/Jenett is implicated but does NOT confess to the poisoning.  She would have attempted to poison a couple of horses in Milav/Morgan's barn but the water got diverted to Jev/Hoel's.  (I'm adding stuff about the aqueduct and how the water travels to the barns, and a barrel of poison...)  So it was an accident that the poison got to more than one barn, then a vicious viral thing that attacks horses weakened by a bout with the poison?  That would kill more horses without it seeming Becca/Jenett is trying to wipe out all the horses.  Is that better?

Okay, welcome back Lee!

Do you mind starting from the beginning?  I've changed the names to more Welsh names for a better feel.  I've polished/revised/tweaked those early chapters, and chapter 14 and 15 are completely new.
Thanks!

Okie dokie, the rewrite is totally posted!  Lay it on me...how's the ending?  better?

I read the first chapter (Under the Almond Trees) last night and boy am I impressed, Ann. Will leave a review today.

I hear you.  I'm having the same problem with my new YA.  LOL   But it was a great read, Ann.  Looking forward to the next chapter.

Hey Ann! I didn't forget about you...just behind and this info clears up some stuff!

Ann Walters wrote:

I found a rare book online that is a journal written by a cousin of my greatgrandmother about his journey around the horn in a ship owned by the family.

Holy cow!  Your greatgrandmother?  That's amazing!

Hi Ann --

I don't know if you're still interested, but I finally got around to writing a 500 word thing that could be used for a guest post on your blog.  It's about what to do "when things don't go as planned" in our stories.  This has been a topic of discussion in my local writer's group this week, and I thought it might make an interesting topic for your readers as well.

So, if you'd like to see it, just let me know how to get it to you -- email, post on this thread, whatever.  (If you don't like it, of course, you're under no obligation to post it.  )

Thanks so much for the invitation.

Third chapter of Under the Almond Trees is up for those who are interested.  This is new for me, so I'd really like to know whatcha think.

Ann Walters wrote:

Oh, Rita, I'd love to see it! email it to me, please:  lindaulleseit@sbcglobal.net

Thank you!

Okay, Ann -- It should be in your inbox now.  Let me know if you received it, and if it'll work.

Thanks again.

I'll check it out, Ann.